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Better driver education for better driving habits is more effective than heavier punishments for driving offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

Better driver education for better driving habits is more effective than heavier punishments for driving offences. v. 1
I would agree the statement that high-quality education for better driving is more beneficial than imposing penalty for breaking the traffic rules. Since people get driving license easily, they do not know much about the traffic protocols. They are not taught about safe driving before authorizing the license. Some people are not rich to pay fines for breaking some rules. So it is required to have a better education for that. Firstly, in some countries, a driving license is assigned to the user without knowing the knowledge of the user. If someone who might be having a lack of knowledge about the traffic rules, he could break the red light on the road or he could accidentally perform an accident. Sometimes, some people do not wear helmet while riding a bike. All these happen due to lack of education among the people. Secondly, sometimes people are fined a heavy money that they cannot afford to pay it. Since they are already very poor and they have to take care of their family from their limited amount of salary, it is not possible for them to pay a tremendous amount of money to the traffic police. It has been observed that in some countries, where people get training to, how to follow the traffic rules on the road, there accident cases and penalty cases are very less. In conclusion, I would always be in support of, educating people before giving driving license to them because it will help in reduction of accidents and will stop people from breaking any traffic laws.
I would
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the statement that high-quality education for better
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is more beneficial than imposing penalty for breaking the
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traffic
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rules
. Since
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people
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get
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driving
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easily
, they do not know much about the
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traffic
protocols. They are not taught about safe
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driving
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before
authorizing the
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license
.
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Some
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people
are not rich to pay fines for breaking
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some
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rules
.
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So
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to have a better education for that.

Firstly
, in
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countries, a
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driving
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license
is assigned
to the user without knowing the knowledge of the user. If someone who might be having a lack of knowledge about the
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traffic
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rules
, he could break the red light on the
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road or
he could
accidentally
perform an accident.
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,
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some
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do not wear helmet while riding a bike. All these happen due to lack of education among the
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people
.

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,
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sometimes
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are fined
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a heavy money
that they cannot afford to pay it. Since they are already
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very
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poor and
they
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take care of their family from their limited amount of salary, it is not possible for them to pay a tremendous amount of money to the
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traffic
police. It has
been observed
that in
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some
countries, where
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people
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get
training to, how to follow the
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traffic
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rules
on the road, there accident cases and penalty cases are
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very
less.

In conclusion
, I would always be in support of, educating
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people
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before
giving
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driving
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license
to them
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it will
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help
in reduction of accidents and will
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stop
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people
from breaking any
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laws.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Better driver education for better driving habits is more effective than heavier punishments for driving offences. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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