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In the recent years, there has been an increase in the number of people got killed on the road. Traffic designers blame drivers for driving too fast and drivers say the roads are bad. Who is to be blamed for the accidents deaths caused on roads? v.1

In the recent years, there has been an increase in the number of people got killed on the road. Traffic designers blame drivers for driving too fast and drivers say the roads are bad. Who is to be blamed for the accidents deaths caused on roads? v. 1
Death toll has been increased significantly in various parts of the world over the last few years. Large numbers of casualties are happening due to over speeding, violation of traffic rules and poor infrastructure of roads. People associated with traffic department claim that rash driving, excessive speed of cars and unwilling attitude to follow rules and regulation by drivers are the primary reasons for accidents. However, drivers say that lack of preemptive measures, inadequate road facilities and pathetic design of roads immensely increased the risk of accidents. I believe that both drivers and traffic designers are mutually responsible for the rise of road tragedies. It is the main responsibility of traffic department to take necessary measures to control such incidents by introducing legislation for driving. Firstly, there is a need to fix the speed limit while driving in the city and outside city. Surveillance cameras should be installed on busiest parts of the city to monitor speed limit. Furthermore, new and strict rules of law should be implemented. People found guilty of breaking laws should be sentenced to jail or imposed heavy fines. Drivers can play a pivotal role in mitigating the traffic woes. They should be given training of driving and a need of comprehensive test that include both practical and theoretical test. This will ensure their capacity of driving and knowledge about traffic rules. In addition to this, Government should make attempts to organise seminars and workshops to increase awareness among drivers. To sum up, I would like to say that it is an equal responsibility of both drivers and lawmakers to take precautionary steps to avoid any injuries. There is dire need of legislation on the traffic designers end and also need to create perceptiveness among drivers.
Death toll has
been increased
significantly
in various parts of the world over the last few years. Large numbers of casualties are happening due to over speeding, violation of
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traffic
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rules
and poor infrastructure of
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roads
.
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People
associated with
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traffic
department claim that rash
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driving
, excessive speed of cars and unwilling attitude to follow
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rules
and regulation by
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drivers
are the primary reasons for accidents.
However
,
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drivers
say that lack of preemptive measures, inadequate
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road
facilities and pathetic design of
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roads
immensely
increased the
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risk
of accidents. I believe that both
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drivers
and
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traffic
designers are
mutually
responsible for the rise of
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road
tragedies.

It is the main responsibility of
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traffic
department to take necessary measures to control such incidents by introducing legislation for
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driving
.
Firstly
, there is a
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need
to
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fix
the speed limit while
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driving
in the city and outside city. Surveillance cameras should
be installed
on busiest parts of the city to monitor speed limit.
Furthermore
, new and strict
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rules
of law should
be implemented
.
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People
found guilty of breaking laws should
be sentenced
to jail or imposed heavy fines.

Drivers can play a pivotal role in mitigating the
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traffic
woes. They should be
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given
training of
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driving
and a
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need
of comprehensive
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test
that include both practical and theoretical
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test
. This will ensure their capacity of
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driving
and knowledge about
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traffic
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rules
.
In addition
to this,
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Government
should
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make
attempts to
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organise
seminars and workshops to increase awareness among drivers.

To sum up, I would like to say that it is an equal responsibility of both
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drivers
and lawmakers to take precautionary steps to avoid any injuries. There is dire
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need
of legislation on the
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traffic
designers
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end
and
also
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need
to create perceptiveness among
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drivers
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the recent years, there has been an increase in the number of people got killed on the road. Traffic designers blame drivers for driving too fast and drivers say the roads are bad. Who is to be blamed for the accidents deaths caused on roads? v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
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