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The vast majority of people depend upon machinery rather than human. They think that human work needs more correction. We are living in the computer age. Modern technology is playing a salient role in every field. In my opinion, I would like to describe the more reasonable pro and cons of this statement. First of all, the most effective advantage is saving money and cost too. Humans work is slow and not complete some time. Therefore, most of the companies always use electronic work rather than humans. Majority of employees have their family member, some time is really hard to cover someone shift. They started to use a computer, more machines for hand work instead of human work. For example, teachers job replace with the computer, handmade work alter into machines. However, machines need repair many times to expand work. Machines need commands to do work start from 1 to 100. Supervision is a must to look after expensive machines and also charges for security. These main reasons, how machines are not reliable and trustworthy. Humans always start work after some practical experience, however, machines got the only command. Humans work always can keep the long term in their cabinets but machines can damage anytime. In a conclusion, everything has positive and negative impacts. moreover, employment is essential for the company market. Governments should fix some jobs in every field, so, no one can survive to get their rights.
The vast majority of
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people
depend upon machinery
rather
than
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human
. They
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think
that
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human
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work
needs more correction. We are living in the computer age. Modern technology is playing a salient role in every field. In my opinion, I would like to
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describe
the more reasonable pro and cons of this statement.

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First of all
, the most effective advantage is saving money and cost too.
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Humans
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work
is slow and not complete
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some
time.
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, most of the
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companies
always
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use
electronic
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work
rather
than
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humans
. Majority of employees have their family member,
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some
time is
really
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hard
to cover someone
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shift
. They
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started
to
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use
a computer, more
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machines
for hand
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work
instead
of
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human
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work
.
For example
, teachers job replace with the computer, handmade
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work
alter into machines.

However
,
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machines
need repair
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many
times to expand
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work
.
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Machines
need commands to do
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work
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start
from 1 to 100. Supervision is a
After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use "must" or "have to" here.
must to
look after expensive
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machines
and
also
charges for security. These main reasons, how
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machines
are not reliable and trustworthy.
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Humans
always
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start
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after
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some
practical experience,
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,
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machines
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the
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only
command.
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Humans
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work always
can
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keep
the long term in their cabinets
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but
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machines
can damage anytime.

In a conclusion, everything has
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positive
and
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impacts.
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moreover
, employment is essential for the
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company
market.
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Governments
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fix
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some
jobs in every field,
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, no one can survive to
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get
their rights.
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IELTS essay used more machinery rather than human

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
239 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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