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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately KwlMN
We also have to take into account the music that is used in the film, as it barely hints, so it makes the atmosphere continue to be suspenseful. We only have a moment in which we hear some sounds of violins, violas and cellos that warn us that something serious may happen. All these elements are typical of the Gothic novel, since they help to make the environment darker and the viewer does not know what can happen next. Of course, the Gothic novel is related to the romantic novel. This can also be seen in this movie. At the beginning of the film you can not think that it has aspects of the romantic novel, but when we reach the end we see that the love / hate relationship between the protagonist and his mother is not healthy, if not dangerous. In the end, we came to understand why the protagonist behaved so strange and mysterious. It also makes us understand that the protagonist has some mental illness or something related to madness. This may also have an important relationship with the Gothic novel, as the protagonists are usually mentally unstable. In addition, this madness is often related to the feelings of people, so it implies that it is related to the romantic novel, the only detail is that in Gothic all these feelings are taken to the extreme. Another factor is that in these novels there is usually some death and above all the protagonist usually hide death forever. This factor is quite clear, although thanks to the fact that the film is in black and white, we can not appreciate the murder clearly, since we do not see the blood, but this is where the music appears, because at this moment it is when the string instruments It does its function and tells us that something bad has happened.
We
also
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have to
take into account the music
that is
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used
in the film, as it
barely
hints,
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so
it
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makes
the atmosphere continue to be suspenseful. We
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only
have a moment in which we hear
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some
sounds of violins, violas and cellos that warn us that something serious may happen. All these elements are typical of the
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Gothic
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novel
, since they
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help
to
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make
the environment darker and the viewer does not know what can happen
next
.

Of course
, the
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Gothic
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novel
is
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related
to the romantic
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novel
. This can
also
be
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seen
in this movie. At the beginning of the film you can not
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think
that it has aspects of the romantic
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novel
,
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but
when we reach the
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end
we
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see
that the
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love
/ hate relationship between the
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protagonist
and his mother is not healthy, if not
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dangerous
. In the
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end
, we came to understand why the
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protagonist
behaved
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so
strange and mysterious. It
also
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makes
us understand that the
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protagonist
has
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some
mental illness or something
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related
to madness. This may
also
have an
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important
relationship with the
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Gothic
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novel
, as the
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protagonists
are
usually
mentally unstable.
In addition
, this madness is
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often
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related
to the feelings of
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people
,
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so
it implies that it is
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related
to the romantic
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novel
, the
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only
detail is that in
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Gothic
all these feelings
are taken
to the extreme.

Another factor is that in these
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novels
there is
usually
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some
death and
above all
the
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protagonist
usually
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hide
death forever. This factor is quite
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clear
, although thanks to the fact that the film is in black and white, we can not appreciate the murder
clearly
, since we do not
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see
the blood,
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but
this is where the music appears,
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because
at this moment it is when the string instruments It does its function and
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tells
us that something
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bad
has happened.
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IELTS essay Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
312 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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