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Animal testing for cosmetic should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Before 1938, there was no technique or law to regulate the safety of cosmetic, so that animal experimentation was used as an effective way to test and determine the safety of products before the cosmetic was sold. According to Human Society International (2013), two hundred and thousand animals have to endure pain and death just for cosmetic every year around the world. The issue of making this method illegal still is a subject of much controversy. ​ From my perspective, it is essential that animal experimentation should be prohibited globally since it is unethical and dispensable. Firstly, the advocate of this experimentation would argue that cosmetic products have to meet specific functions and requirements on beauty improvement; and due to the similar structure of animal with human body, they are supposed to be the most optimal test subjects that can firmly ensure the safety standard of production. This point seems to have certain surface values. However, on a thorough examination, it is nothing but a mere discrimination against the accuracy and legitimacy of this approach. The Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) and the British Union for the Abolition of Vivisection (BUAV) both indicates that this method is poor scientific practice and can be erroneous owing to its misleading animal models and obsolete technique. Moreover, with the cutting-edge technology, alternative experiments are currently developing to examine the ingredient in makeup production rather than these unnecessary and poisoning tests. Some advanced and practical solutions for this issue were shown by Maxwell, et al. (2008) such as “ Chemical Reactivity; Peptide Reactivity; Epidermal Disposition/Tissue Bio availability; Epi -dermal Inflammation; DC activation and T-cell proliferation “. Besides this, Drs. MacLennan and Amos in “Cosmetics and Toiletries, Manufacturers and Suppliers” also invalidate the feasibility to correlate data from animal to human by virtue of their fundamental differences. Because of these reasons, cosmetic companies and brands should entirely adopt non-animal methods for their produce progress. Secondly, the opponents of banning animal testing also maintain that some species infrahuman may not have strong feelings and emotion like humans because of the lacking in consciousness. While it is true that animal is made anaesthesia during testing progress, it is hardly acceptable that they still have to suffer from toxic chemicals and serious diseases, which can lead to day-to-day damaged organ system before they ultimately die. A further research found that with a view to guarantee each particular function of products, animal are usually interfected by heavy metals, skin burned, maimed, brain damage, blinded and other invasive procedures in these lethal experimentations. (Act, Tenneriello, Koppisch, & Fagan, 2014). Furthermore, these unreliable tests are evaluated to be barbaric and inhumane since their primary purpose merely for appearance improvement. As the research of Human Society International (2013) mentioned above, millions animals are slaughtered each year just to create huge profits for cosmetic companies. Because of all the injury that living creatures have to undergo, these cruel experiments should be limited. Nowadays, both citizens and government have to take legal actions to restrict this kind of experiment in order to protect the survival of the animal. For instance, a large number of countries, especially in the EU, laid down some rules that prohibit on the sale and transport of cosmetics animal-tested in 2013. In addition, consumers of cosmetic should purchase cruelty-free products like: Lush, Cosrx or The body shop in order to encourage many alternative methods that science has to offer. By means of conclusion, government should combine with cosmetic companies to put an end to these cruel experiments. It is widely believed that animal tests should be performed just in case scientists have no alternative choices and for medical purposes. This method needs to be banned widely to partly guarantee the survival of species.
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animal
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was
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test
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safety of
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products
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before
the
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cosmetic
was sold
. According to
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Human
Society International (2013), two hundred and
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animals
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endure pain and death
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for
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cosmetic
every year around the world. The issue of making this
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method
illegal
still
is a subject of much controversy. ​ From my perspective, it is essential that
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animal
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experimentation
should
be prohibited
globally since it is unethical and dispensable.

Firstly
, the advocate of this
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experimentation
would argue that
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cosmetic
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products
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have to
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meet
specific functions and requirements on beauty improvement; and due to the similar structure of
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animal
with
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human
body, they
are supposed
to be the most optimal
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test
subjects that can
firmly
ensure the safety standard of production. This point seems to have certain surface values.
However
, on a thorough examination, it is nothing
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but
a mere discrimination against the accuracy and legitimacy of this approach. The Ethical Treatment of
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Animals
(PETA) and the British Union for the Abolition of Vivisection (
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BUAV
) both indicates that this
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method
is poor scientific practice and can be erroneous owing to its misleading
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animal
models and obsolete technique.
Moreover
, with the cutting-edge technology, alternative
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experiments
are
currently
developing to examine the ingredient in makeup production
rather
than these unnecessary and poisoning
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tests
.
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Some
advanced and practical solutions for this issue
were shown
by Maxwell, et al. (2008) such as
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“
Chemical Reactivity; Peptide Reactivity; Epidermal Disposition/Tissue Bio availability;
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Epi
-dermal Inflammation; DC activation and T-cell proliferation “.
Besides
this,
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Drs
.
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MacLennan
and Amos in
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“Cosmetics
and Toiletries, Manufacturers and Suppliers”
also
invalidate the feasibility to correlate data from
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animal
to
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human
by virtue of their fundamental differences.
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Because
of these reasons,
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cosmetic
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companies
and brands should
entirely
adopt non-animal
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methods
for their

produce progress.

Secondly
, the opponents of banning
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animal
testing
also
maintain that
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some
species

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infrahuman
may not have strong feelings and emotion like
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humans
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because
of the

lacking in consciousness. While it is true that
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animal
is made
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anaesthesia
during testing progress, it is hardly acceptable that they
still
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have to
suffer from toxic chemicals and serious diseases, which can lead to day-to-day damaged organ system
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before
they
ultimately
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die
. A
further
research found that with a view to guarantee each particular function of
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products
,
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animal
are
usually
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interfected
by heavy metals, skin burned, maimed, brain damage, blinded and other invasive procedures in these lethal
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experimentations
. (Act,
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Tenneriello
,
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Koppisch
, &
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Fagan
, 2014).
Furthermore
, these unreliable
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tests
are evaluated
to be barbaric and inhumane since their primary purpose
merely
for appearance improvement. As the research of
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Human
Society International (2013) mentioned above, millions
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animals
are slaughtered
each year
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just
to create huge profits for
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cosmetic
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companies
.
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Because
of all the injury that living creatures
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have to
undergo, these cruel
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experiments
should
be limited
.

Nowadays, both citizens and
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government
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have to
take legal actions to restrict this kind of
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experiment
in order to protect the survival of the
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animal
.
For instance
,
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a large number of
countries,
especially
in the EU, laid down
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some
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rules
that prohibit on the sale and transport of
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cosmetics
animal-
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tested
in 2013.
In addition
, consumers of
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cosmetic
should
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purchase
cruelty-free
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products
like: Lush,
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Cosrx
or The body shop in order to encourage
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many
alternative
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methods
that science
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has to
offer.

By means of conclusion,
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government
should combine with
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cosmetic
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companies
to put an
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end
to these cruel
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experiments
. It is
widely
believed that
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animal
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tests
should
be performed
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just
in case scientists have no alternative choices and for medical purposes. This
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method
needs to
be banned
widely
to partly guarantee the survival of species.
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IELTS essay Animal testing for cosmetic should be banned.

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