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which is easier or more comforting the life we have right now or when our grandparents were a child. Explain with reasons and examples. v.1

which is easier or more comforting the life we have right now or when our grandparents were a child. Explain with reasons and examples. v. 1
In recent days, it has been an increasing concern that communities think if adults let children do whatever they want, they will become selfish. However, it is controversial that others believe it is one the main key to help teenagers have their own decision-making in the future. In this essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of both these views. On the one hand, it is undeniable that allowing the young to make their own choices brings numerous benefits. First, it is one of an essential factors help them more independent. For example, if parents allow their children to decide how to choose clothes, what to eat, they gradually form an their own lifestyle without family’s help. As a result, they can become more mature and carefully consider to make a right decision in the future. Second, from the ethical perspective, as long as not break the rule, doing what people want is the citizen’s right. Those who can choose their favourite job might become a successful worker because they enjoy their life and they could determine their purpose. On the other hand, it is obvious that there are some drawbacks of this issue. One of the main disadvantages is that a juvenile tends to be a selfish person. Specifically, allowing the youth to get their making-decision without a limitation may make them have a thought ‘ I am a king’. They just do what they want and do not care people around them. As a result, the young-age group seems to put themselves over others and feel envy when other friends have something better than them. Not to mention that they are disrespected in a society. In conclusion, there are both advantages and disadvantages to this problem.
In recent days, it has been an increasing concern that communities
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if adults
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children do whatever they want, they will become selfish.
However
, it is controversial that others believe it is
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one
the main key to
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help
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teenagers
have their
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own
decision-making in the future. In this essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of both these views.

On the one hand, it is undeniable that allowing the young to
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make
their
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own
choices brings numerous benefits.
First
, it is one of an essential factors
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help
them more independent.
For example
, if parents
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allow
their children to decide how to choose clothes, what to eat, they
gradually
form an their
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own
lifestyle without family’s
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help
.
As a result
, they can become more mature and
carefully
consider to
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make
a right decision in the future. Second, from the ethical perspective, as long as not break the
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rule
, doing what
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people
want is the citizen’s right. Those who can choose their
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favourite
job might become a successful worker
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because
they enjoy their
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life and
they could determine their purpose.

On the
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hand, it is obvious that there are
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some
drawbacks of this issue. One of the main disadvantages is that a juvenile tends to be a selfish person.
Specifically
, allowing the youth to
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get
their making-decision without a limitation may
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make
them have a
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thought
‘ I am a king’. They
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do what they want and do not care
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people
around them.
As a result
, the young-age group seems to put themselves over others and feel envy when
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other
friends have something better than them. Not to mention that they
are disrespected
in a society.

In conclusion
, there are both advantages and disadvantages to this problem.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay which is easier or more comforting the life we have right now or when our grandparents were a child. Explain with reasons and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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