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University education property students for job and other for functions

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It is evident a fact that the universities, citadels and large academic institutions often impart certain kind of quality education to build the pupils with a trong knowledgeable workforce for future jobs. It is always a highly controversial issue that some people opine that university courses often prepare the students and emphasis more for the technical and management subjects to get them ready for the highly paid jobs whereas some other people argue that they also focus more on other vital aspects which could be helpful. I will shed some light on both the views and will draw a logical conclusion latter on. To commence with, many members of the society opine that universities have a primary responsibility to impart best quality education with the several courses it offers to the students to get enrolled on the basis of choice and interest. In addition, they must produce a workforce that comprises of more knowledge and skills according to the current scenario of technology advancements and globalization. Therefore, they can be prepared through the highly qualified teachers and experts who are involved in the field of space, medical, engineering and other advanced management subjects as per the student’s field of interest. Moreover, universities should develop their campus infrastructure with the smart classrooms, state-of-the-art tech-savvy laboratories for the several subjects so that pupils can learn in more practical and an appropriate manner and big conglomerates recruit them with good designated-job for the various large projects. For instance, in a country like India, there are big academic institutions such as IIM and IIT, where students are prepared through the courses designed by keeping in mind for the future technology and thus they produce the est talent rather than mediocre professionals. However, there are other groups of people who argue that university should also focus on other significant aspects which could be useful for the students in the long run. They believe that a niversity must organize youth festivals and allow the pupils to take participation in quiz, debate, singing and dancing competition. Furthermore, they also emphasise more on sports and extra co-curricular activities which can be vital for the physical and psychological development of the disciple and it can even create a sports celebrity in the long run. In conclusion, as per my viewpoint, the niversity should focus not only to inculcate students with the subjects that are of interest related to tech-savvy but also should give equal importance to the sports and extra co-curricular activities which could be helpful in the future.
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knowledgeable workforce for future jobs. It is always a
highly
controversial issue that
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opine that
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prepare the
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students
and emphasis more for the technical and management
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subjects
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get
them ready for the
highly
paid jobs whereas
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argue that they
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focus more on
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other
vital aspects which could be helpful. I will shed
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light on both the views and will draw a logical conclusion latter on.

To commence with,
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many
members of the society opine that
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universities
have a primary responsibility to
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impart best
quality education with the several courses it offers to the
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students
to
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get
enrolled on the basis of choice and interest.
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must
produce a workforce that
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comprises of
more knowledge and
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skills
according to the
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current
scenario of technology advancements and globalization.
Therefore
, they can
be prepared
through the
highly
qualified teachers and experts who
are involved
in the field of space, medical, engineering and
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other
advanced management
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subjects
as per the
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student’s
field of interest.
Moreover
,
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universities
should develop their campus infrastructure with the smart classrooms, state-of-the-art tech-savvy laboratories for the several
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subjects
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so
that pupils can learn in more practical and an appropriate manner and
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big
conglomerates recruit them with
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good
designated-job for the various large projects.
For instance
, in a country like India, there are
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big
academic institutions such as IIM and IIT, where
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students
are prepared
through the courses designed by keeping in mind for the future technology and
thus
they produce the est talent
rather
than mediocre professionals.

However
, there are
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other
groups of
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people
who argue that
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university
should
also
focus on
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other
significant aspects which could be useful for the
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students
in the long run. They believe that a
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niversity
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organize youth festivals and
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allow
the pupils to take participation in quiz, debate, singing and dancing competition.
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also
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more on sports and extra co-curricular activities which can be vital for the physical and psychological development of the disciple and it can even create a sports celebrity in the long run.

In conclusion
, as per my viewpoint, the
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should focus not
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to inculcate
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students
with the
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that are of interest related to tech-savvy
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but
also
should give equal importance to the sports and extra co-curricular activities which could be helpful in the future.
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IELTS essay University education property students for job and other for functions

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
420 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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