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Some people believe that cohabitation* should be acceptable in this modern world.

Some people believe that cohabitation* should be acceptable in this modern world. 73163

Whether accepting cohabitation should be encourage or not remains controversial. While the modern world is developing day by day but I disagree about this. People should keep the “clearly personal” before get married, especially with Asians, which is the most significant thing of a girl. And the reasons why we should not be accept cohabitation is discuss in the following argument. In the present day, teenager is more open-minded about the world arround. Cohabitating is not rare and maybe this is also a trend which is popular in the age of teen. Firstly, most of people only living together and having a sexual relationship after being married that is appropriate on the politic, and being safe by the law. For example, if having a argument can be not solve, at that time a judgement would be equal decided by the law. Clearly, if two persons live together without being married that be not balance between them anyway. In addition, the social not being safe without law, and people should live with partner as a family after get married. While almost of all was being taught at school about the “Married Role”, so why a part of people still have cohabitation life before marriage. What is the way will they answer to their husband or their wife about that? A perfect marriage only both of them come together with the fresh past. For instance, most of cohabitation life have sexual relationship, which is made the trust decrease really much. Morover, not only their partner care about their past like what but also most of parents also have an impressive about the personal life before to make a decide allow them get married. To sum up, the cohabitation life still a complex problem. People should not concern this to build a good relationship in the future. We were born and matured under the view of our parents, and it may a good way to made them proud.

Whether accepting cohabitation should be Consider using the past participle "encouraged"?encouraged
encourage
 or not remains controversial. While the modern world is developing day by day This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I disagree about this. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
People
 should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 the “clearly
 personal” This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 married, especially
 with Asians, which is the most significant thing of a girl. And the reasons why we should not be Consider using a past participle here: "accepted".accepted
accept
 cohabitation is Consider using a past participle here: "discussed".discussed
discuss
 in the following argument.

In the present day, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenileadolescent
teenager
 is more open-minded about the world Possible spelling mistake found.aroundaground
arround
. Possible spelling mistake found.CohabitationCohabiting
Cohabitating
 is not rare and maybe this is also
 a trend which is popular in the age of teen. Firstly
, most of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 living together and having a sexual relationship after being married
that is
 appropriate on the politic, and being safe by the law. For example
, if having Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'an
a
 argument can be not Consider using a past participle here: "solved".solved
solve
, at that time a judgement would be equal decided by the law. Clearly
, if two persons This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 together without being married
 that be not Consider using a past participle here: "balanced".balanced
balance
 between them anyway. In addition
, the social not being safe without law, and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 with partner as a family after This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 married.

While almost of all was being taught
 at school about the “Married Role”, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 why a part of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
still
 have cohabitation You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
life
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 marriage. What is the way will they answer to their husband or their wife about that? A perfect marriage This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 both of them This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 together with the fresh past. For instance
, Consider using "most cohabitation" or "most of the cohabitation".most cohabitationmost of the cohabitation
most of cohabitation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
life
 have sexual relationship, which is made
 the trust decrease really
 much. Possible spelling mistake found.MoreoverMo rover
Morover
, not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 their partner care about their past like what This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
After 'most of', you should use 'the' ("most of the parents") or simply say "most parents".most of the parentsmost parents
most of parents
also
 have an impressive about the personal You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
life
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
After 'a', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'decide' is correct. If 'decide' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
a decide
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 them This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 married.

To sum up, the cohabitation You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheartgrowthsoulactivity
life
still
 a complex problem. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
People
 should not concern this to build a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 relationship in the future. We were born
 and matured under the view of our parents, and it may a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 way to made them proud. 