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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should require students to study many subjects in different fields rather than just their major subjects.

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Univerities are where studnets learn the most important skills/knowledge of their lives. Different majors with different curriculums help students with their future carrier. I am sure that many people might agree with having more focused schedules to concentrate better on their major. However, I know many other people who believe studying more subjects help students in many ways. In my view, students should study many subjects for two major reasons. First, studying variety of subjects help students with finding a job or graduate school. I remember when I was a student in pharmacy school, I used to complain about the amount of different and irrelevant courses that I had to take to graduate. I never understood the value until I started looking for a graduate school. I was not successful to find a graduate school in pharmacy major, however, since I had taken so many chemistry courses, I managed to get acceptance from three graduate school. It was so shocked that they also offered me a very good scholarship not only enough to pay for my tuition and fee but I can afford my living expenses. Another example comes to my mind to illustrate this is my friend's sister who also went to a pharmacy school in Iran. She found a job in a pharmaceutical company's marketing group. I don't think she would be able to find that job if she did not have so many marketing and management courses. As a result of this, she is planning to pursue her PhD in marketing at UT Dallas. Second, I think studying many subjects may help students to find different interests. At my current graduate school, SMU, undergarduate students are supposed to choose a minor along with their major. Sometimes this gives undergarduate students an opportunity to rethink their major. There is a student in my lab whose major was accounting but his minor was marketing. After taking variety of courses that SMU offers he switched his major to marketing. This opportunity helped him substantially with finding his interest. To sum up, I think it is beneficial to have study many subjects. I suggest students to attend schools that offer many subject in their major rather than just focused subjects.
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Univerities
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learn the most
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important
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skills
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lives
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majors
with
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different
curriculums
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help
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students
with their future carrier. I am sure that
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many
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people
might
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agree
with having more focused schedules to concentrate better on their
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major
.
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, I know
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many
other
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people
who believe studying more
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subjects
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help
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students
in
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ways. In my view,
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students
should study
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subjects
for two
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major
reasons.

First
, studying variety of
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subjects
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help
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students
with finding a job or
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graduate
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school
. I remember when I was a
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student
in pharmacy
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school
, I
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used
to complain about the amount of
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different
and irrelevant
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courses
that I had to take to
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graduate
. I never understood the value until I
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started
looking for a
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graduate
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school
.
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I
was not successful to find a
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graduate
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school
in pharmacy
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major
,
however
, since I had taken
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so
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chemistry
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courses
, I managed to
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get
acceptance from three
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graduate
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school
. It was
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so
shocked that they
also
offered me a
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very
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good
scholarship not
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only
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enough
to pay for my tuition and fee
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I can afford my living expenses. Another example
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comes
to my mind to illustrate this is my friend's sister who
also
went to a pharmacy
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school
in Iran. She found a job in a pharmaceutical
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company
's
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marketing
group. I don't
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think
she would be able to find that job if she did not have
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so
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many
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marketing
and management
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courses
.
As a result
of this, she is planning to pursue her PhD in
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marketing
at UT Dallas.

Second, I
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studying
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to find
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different
interests. At my
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current
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graduate
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school
,
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SMU
,
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undergarduate
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students
are supposed
to choose a minor along with their
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major
.
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Sometimes
this gives
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undergarduate
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students
an opportunity to rethink their
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. There is a
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student
in my lab whose
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major
was accounting
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but
his minor was
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marketing
.
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taking variety of
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courses
that
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SMU
offers he switched his
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major
to
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marketing
. This opportunity
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helped
him
substantially
with finding his interest.

To sum up, I
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think
it is beneficial to have study
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subjects
. I suggest
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schools
that offer
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subject
in their
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major
rather
than
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focused
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.
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IELTS essay Universities should require students to study many subjects in different fields rather than just their major subjects.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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