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The reading claims that wearing uniform is an excellent way of reducing stress and difficulties among students.

The reading claims that wearing uniform is an excellent way of reducing stress and difficulties among students. 85J6l
The reading claims that wearing uniform is an excellent way of reducing stress and difficulties among students. The professor concedes that the author's points about reducing difficulties can be true, but except of this point, nothing much was correctly discussed in the article. So, she refutes each of author's reasons. First, the reading posits that families and students would benefit from this policy because it would decrease the clothing cost. The lecturer opposes this point by stating that students' parents would still spend the extra money on fashionable clothes. She explains that uniforms are not provided for free. And, parents have to pay more for them. Also, because uniforms are sold in specialty stores with higher prices, so they have to pay even more. She adds that uniforms are not the only clothes that students wear, meaning they still need fashionable clothes for the weekends, when they hang out with other students or friends. Second, the article asserts that wearing uniform will eliminate the unnecessary distraction. The lecturer contends that wearing same clothes will not eliminate the distraction. She explains that students use fashinable clothes to emphasize attractive things and untrendy clothes to deemphasize the unattractive things. So, by replacing regular clothing with uniforms, they will focus on other things. For instance, they will focus on how themselves or other students look. Plus, they will alter the uniforms to make them look in a way that they want. Third, the reading avers that uniforms will help students to develop a sense of community. The professor refutes this point by mentioning that this point is the least responsible reason. She says that there is no way to build a community by just wearing same clothing. She states that students communicate their individuality by wearing different clothes. Forcing students to wear uniforms is going to suffocate their independency and the sense of being themselves. So, it should be avoided.
The reading claims that wearing
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uniform
is an excellent way of reducing
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stress
and difficulties among
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students
. The professor concedes that the author's
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points
about reducing difficulties can be true,
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but
except of this
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point
, nothing much was
correctly
discussed in the article.
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So
, she refutes each of author's reasons.

First
, the reading posits that families and
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students
would benefit from this policy
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because
it would decrease the clothing cost. The lecturer opposes this
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point
by stating that students' parents would
still
spend the extra money on fashionable
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clothes
. She
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explains
that
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uniforms
are not provided for free. And, parents
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have to
pay more for them.
Also
,
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because
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uniforms
are sold
in specialty stores with higher prices,
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so
they
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have to
pay even more. She
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adds
that
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uniforms
are not the
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only
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clothes
that
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students
wear, meaning they
still
need fashionable
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clothes
for the weekends, when they hang out with other
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students
or friends.

Second, the article asserts that wearing
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uniform
will eliminate the unnecessary distraction. The lecturer contends that wearing same
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clothes
will not eliminate the distraction. She
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explains
that
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students
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use
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fashinable
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clothes
to emphasize attractive things and
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untrendy
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clothes
to
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deemphasize
the unattractive things.
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So
, by replacing regular clothing with
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uniforms
, they will focus on other things.
For instance
, they will focus on how themselves or other
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students
look. Plus, they will alter the
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uniforms
to
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make
them look in a way that they want.

Third, the reading avers that
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uniforms
will
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help
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students
to develop a sense of community. The professor refutes this
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point
by mentioning that this
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point
is the least responsible reason. She says that there is no way to build a community by
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just
wearing same clothing. She states that
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students
communicate their individuality by wearing
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different
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clothes
. Forcing
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students
to wear
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uniforms
is going to suffocate their
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independency
and the sense of being themselves.
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So
, it should
be avoided
.

IELTS essay The reading claims that wearing uniform is an excellent way of reducing stress and difficulties among students.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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