It is often argued that books are irreplaceable with television as a learning tool and that children are less well-educated today. I strongly disagree with this statement because nowadays, children are more well-educated due to the introduction of televisions
Firstly, television does not make children less well educated as the literacy rate has increased in the past few years due to the introduction of televisions. It is believed that children pay more attention to the things on television than in class due to the creative ideas created by televisions. Besides, children tend to pay more attention and learn things at a faster rate through televisions. For instance, it is proven that children who study via an educational programme on television usually perform better than those who attend tuition. Thus, it is safe to say that television does have a great impact on the literacy rate
Secondly, children are more passionate to learn new things in school nowadays due to the influence on televisions. In my opinion, children take more initiative in learning and it has reduced parents’ hassle on urging them to study. For example, statistics have shown that schools which introduce videos during class perform better than others. This show that more children are eager to learn due to their passion and the influence on children.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that televisions can replace books as a learning tool as children are more passionate about learning and literacy rate has increased
It is
often
argued that books are irreplaceable with
television
as a
learning
tool and that
children
are less well-educated
today
. I
strongly
disagree with this statement
because
nowadays,
children
are more well-educated
due
to the introduction of
televisions
Firstly
,
television
does not
make
children
less
well educated
as the literacy rate has increased in the past few years
due
to the introduction of
televisions
. It
is believed
that
children
pay more attention to the things on
television
than in
class
due
to the creative
ideas
created by
televisions
.
Besides
,
children
tend to pay more attention and learn things at a faster rate through
televisions
.
For instance
, it
is proven
that
children
who study via an educational
programme
on
television
usually
perform better than those who attend tuition.
Thus
, it is safe to say that
television
does have a great impact on the literacy rate
Secondly
,
children
are more passionate to learn new things in school nowadays
due
to the influence on
televisions
. In my opinion,
children
take more initiative in
learning
and it has
reduced
parents’ hassle on urging them to study.
For example
, statistics have shown that schools which introduce videos during
class
perform better than others. This
show
that more
children
are eager to learn
due
to their passion and the influence on children.
In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that
televisions
can replace books as a
learning
tool as
children
are more passionate about
learning
and literacy rate has increased
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