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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.8

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 8
It is quiet common these days to see some catchphrases for women's rights, and a lot of arguments are going on for providing more opportunities for women to be as equal as men. This question states that universities should accept men and women equally in any subject. In this essay, I will discuss my view, and draw my conclusion in this argument. No doubt that some subjects are fitting better for a specific gender. For example, some subjects need more muscles and horrific power while other subjects need multitasking ability and critical vision. Having equal numbers in the previous subjects is unfair and it will be like asking for equality by doing the opposite. Also, the acceptance process should depend on subject competencies and requirements regardless the gender. Certainly, it acquires you to study a subject to have the knowledge and the prerequisite for that subject. Being women and men will not play a role in that unless the subject will fit better for the other gender. Equality between genders is desirable in any field, but asking for equal numbers will harm the university standards, likewise, it will lead to ethical problems. If the university accepts a female over a male, who has qualifications that beat hers, the university standards will absolutely over the year diminish as a result. Moreover, acceptance of a gender over the other, even if the subject requirements are clear who should be chosen, will be ethically unacceptable and will harm the university reputation over the years. In conclusion, I believe that treating women equally is dependable, but splitting the vacancies equally between men and women for every subject is unreasonable. An acceptance process in universities must depend on the subject requirements to be fairer, and to achieve the meaning of equality, and this is actually what women are looking for.
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some
catchphrases for women's rights, and
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a lot of
arguments are going on for providing more opportunities for
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women
to be as equal as
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men
. This question states that
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universities
should accept
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men
and
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women
equally
in any
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subject
. In this essay, I will discuss my view, and draw my conclusion in this argument.

No doubt that
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some
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subjects
are fitting better for a specific gender.
For example
,
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some
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subjects
need more muscles and horrific power while other
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subjects
need multitasking ability and critical vision. Having equal numbers in the previous
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subjects
is unfair and it will be like asking for equality by doing the opposite.

Also
, the acceptance process should depend on
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subject
competencies and requirements regardless the gender.
Certainly
, it acquires you to study a
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subject
to have the knowledge and the prerequisite for that
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subject
. Being
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women
and
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men
will not play a role in that unless the
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subject
will fit better for the other gender.

Equality between genders is desirable in any field,
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but
asking for equal numbers will harm the
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university
standards,
likewise
, it will lead to ethical problems. If the
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university
accepts a female
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over
a male, who has qualifications that beat hers, the
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university
standards will
absolutely
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over
the year diminish
as a result
.
Moreover
, acceptance of a gender
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over
the other, even if the
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subject
requirements are
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clear
who should
be chosen
, will be
ethically
unacceptable and will harm the
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university
reputation
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over
the years.

In conclusion
, I believe that treating
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women
equally
is dependable,
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but
splitting the vacancies
equally
between
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men
and
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women
for every
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subject
is unreasonable. An acceptance process in
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universities
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must
depend on the
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subject
requirements to be fairer, and to achieve the meaning of equality, and this is actually what
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women
are looking for.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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