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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 3
Introduction: Accepting equal number of male and female students in every subject is debatable. Universities should consider enrolling same number of male and female students in all subjects. This essay will discuss why enrolling students based on gender ration in every subject is not a good idea. Furthermore, it will also elaborate the consequences of enrolling students equally. Students should have the freedom to choose their favourite subjects, which i believe would not be possible if enrolment is based on equal number of male and female candidates. It might prevent students from learning their favourite subjects, if there are not equal number of students enrolled from the opposite gender. For example, gymnastic is not popular among gents when compared to lady students. This could result in interested female students not able to learn gymnastics. Teenagers sex ratio in the locality is one of the factors which could affect this the idea having equal number of sex genders in every subject. If the region has more female candidates compared to male, it would not be possible to enrol students equally. This will lead to not having adequate male students in proportion of female students. Not having equal students with the opposite sex would lead to less number of candidate enrolment for every subject. Conclusion: Enrolling male and female students equally would not be a great idea. Besides, this criteria would create a situation where students would not be able to select and study their favourite subjects. Furthermore, it would unmotivate students who could not select their favourite subject and create a negative impact over the classroom and tutor. Students might be forced to enrol subjects which they do not like due to non-availability would result in bad performance. Therefore, I would like reiterate that student's admission based on equal gender is not a good idea.
Introduction: Accepting
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number
of male and
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female
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students
in every
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subject
is debatable. Universities should consider
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enrolling
same
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number
of male and
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female
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students
in all
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subjects
. This essay will discuss why
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enrolling
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students
based on gender ration in every
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subject
is not a
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good
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idea
.
Furthermore
, it will
also
elaborate the consequences of
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enrolling
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students
equally
.

Students should have the freedom to choose their
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favourite
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subjects
, which
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i
believe would not be possible if
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enrolment
is based
on
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equal
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number
of male and
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female
candidates. It might
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prevent
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students
from learning their
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favourite
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subjects
, if there are not
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equal
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number
of
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students
enrolled from the opposite gender.
For example
, gymnastic is not popular among gents when compared to lady
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students
. This could result in interested
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female
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students
not able to learn gymnastics.

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Teenagers
sex ratio in the locality is one of the factors which could affect this the
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idea
having
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equal
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number
of sex genders in every
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subject
. If the region has more
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female
candidates compared to male, it would not be possible to enrol
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students
equally
. This will lead to not having adequate male
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students
in proportion of
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female
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students
. Not having
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equal
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students
with the opposite sex would lead to less
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number
of candidate
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enrolment
for every subject.

Conclusion:
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male and
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female
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students
equally
would not be a great
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idea
.
Besides
,
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this
criteria would create a situation where
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students
would not be able to select and study their
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favourite
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subjects
.
Furthermore
, it would
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unmotivate
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students
who could not select their
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favourite
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subject
and create a
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negative
impact over the classroom and tutor.
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Students
might
be forced
to enrol
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subjects
which they do not like due to non-availability would result in
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bad
performance.
Therefore
, I would like reiterate that student's admission based on
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equal
gender is not a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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idea
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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