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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v.27

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 27
In this world, there is an emerging number of universities opened up for of students to learn or get a degree, and preparing for the upcoming future. Many male and female students take admission in different subjects every year. Unfortunately, in some countries, many universities have bounded criteria to register more number of male students as compared to females. Due to the least availability of seats for female students, they are forced to leave studies which have become the cause of illiteracy rate to increase. Similarly, in Pakistan, more seats are available for males as compared to females both in public or private institutes. For instance, in the University of Lahore, the number of seats for male students is greater in number in Bachelors of Physics but the number of seats for females is greater than males in Bachelors of Architecture. However, it is an undeniable fact that less number of females decide to study in universities but in addition to it, they do not get admission in the field of their own choice because of lack of seats for female students. This injustice not only the cause of illiteracy increment but also urges the females to keep their values down. In Islam, it is clearly declared that there are equal rights for both men and women. Both are the creation of God Almighty. There is no Islamic law which states that females are inferior to males by any aspect of life. Eventually, I will conclude from all discussion above that it must be equal opportunity for male and female students in all universities with an equal number of seats in every offered program as it is a right of women to choose field whatever they want. There should be no enforcement on females for limited fields of education.
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of
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opened up for of
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students
to learn or
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get
a degree, and preparing for the upcoming future.

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male and
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female
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students
take admission in
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different
subjects every year. Unfortunately, in
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some
countries,
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many
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universities
have bounded criteria to register more
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number
of male
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students
as compared to
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females
. Due to the least availability of
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seats
for
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female
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students
, they
are forced
to
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leave
studies which have become the cause of illiteracy rate to increase.

Similarly
, in Pakistan, more
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seats
are available for
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males
as compared to
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females
both in public or private institutes.
For instance
, in the
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University
of Lahore, the
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number
of
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seats
for male
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students
is greater in
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number
in Bachelors of Physics
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but
the
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number
of
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seats
for
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females
is greater than
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males
in Bachelors of Architecture.

However
, it is an undeniable fact that less
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number
of
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females
decide to study in
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universities
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but
in addition
to it, they do not
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get
admission in the field of their
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own
choice
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because
of lack of
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seats
for
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female
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students
. This injustice not
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only
the cause of illiteracy increment
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but
also
urges the
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females
to
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keep
their values down. In Islam, it is
clearly
declared that there are equal rights for both
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men
and women. Both are the creation of God Almighty. There is no Islamic law which states that
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females
are inferior to
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males
by any aspect of life.

Eventually
, I will conclude from all discussion above that it
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must
be equal opportunity for male and
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female
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students
in all
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universities
with an equal
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number
of
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seats
in every offered program as it is a right of women to choose field whatever they want. There should be no enforcement on
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females
for limited fields of education.
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IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 27

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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