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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v.26

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 26
During the last century, people did not even take the time to ask this question to themselves whether educational institutes should enrol an equal number of male and female students?   Firstly most of the female students stopped going to school much earlier than they do today.   And secondly, female and male were separated in class in their early childhood. Besides, male as female used to respect the moral and customs of their period. They were much more sensitive about what could the society think about them. Indeed, it was unusual to see a woman taking up medical studies. Despite the evolution of our society and the growing women’s power some universities or ancient institutions still tend to dismiss candidates’ applications for unique gender reasons. A university is always trying to attract the best students within its walls. If an institution was led to neglect some applications from brilliant students only to respect this equal number of male and female, I would say one thing: this kind of recruitment is not fair. A part of the students dismissed by the university might be the more deserving of a place when we first glance at their proficiencies than other students accepted only thanks to this new law in favour of the equality between men and women. By proceeding this way a university can lose many of future talented students who might bring fame to the university in return by becoming someone well-known. However, if a university has the same percentage of men and women with the same level of qualifications, in this case, they must be led to choose their future students according to this kind of criteria. To conclude and in my opinion universities should not accept their future students owing to an equal percentage of female and male but by analysing carefully the students' competencies.
During the last century,
people
did not even take the time to ask this question to themselves whether educational institutes should enrol an equal number of male and
female
students
?
 
Firstly
most of the
female
students
stopped
going to school much earlier than they do
today
.
 
And
secondly
,
female
and male
were separated
in
class
in their early childhood.
Besides
, male as
female
used
to respect the moral and customs of their period. They were much more sensitive about what could the society
think
about them.
Indeed
, it was unusual to
see
a woman taking up medical studies.

Despite the evolution of our society and the growing women’s power
some
universities
or ancient institutions
still
tend to dismiss candidates’ applications for unique gender reasons.

A
university
is always trying to attract the best
students
within its walls. If an institution
was led
to neglect
some
applications from brilliant
students
only
to respect this equal number of male and
female
, I would say one thing: this kind of recruitment is not
fair
. A part of the
students
dismissed by the
university
might be the more deserving of a place when we
first
glance at their proficiencies than other
students
accepted
only
thanks to this new law in
favour
of the equality between
men
and women. By proceeding this way a
university
can lose
many
of future talented
students
who might bring fame to the
university
in return by becoming someone well-known.

However
, if a
university
has the same percentage of
men
and women with the same level of qualifications,
in this case
, they
must
be led
to choose their future
students
according to this kind of criteria.

To conclude
and in my opinion
universities
should not accept their future
students
owing to an equal percentage of
female
and male
but
by
analysing
carefully
the students' competencies.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 26

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
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