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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.23

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 23
Gender equality is such a debating point these days, where people argue and demand for gender equality for every aspect, for such in work, in education and even in household. To some extent it is fair enough to demand such a thing since we live in a modern world where both men and women are capable in doing similar tasks. However, if we look at this argument which states that tertiary educational institutions should accept the same counts of students for female and male in every subject, there are questions if this is the right initiative in achieving gender equality. To begin with, I agree that universities should have a diversity in number of students. Back in the days, women are not encouraged to pursue education compared to men since men were seen to be the superior in a household. For example, it used to be a law in Pakistan that women were not allowed to study until Malala Yousafzai, who fought for the rights of female learning. In this modern world, it can be seen that there are more females engaging themselves in education. Hence, I believe accepting different genders gives a good opportunity. Nevertheless, accepting the equal number of men and women in every subject is a bit unnecessary. This is because not all men are capable in certain skills and vice versa. For instance, some men are fitter to enrol in Engineering course rather than Fashion. This also applies to women, where some are better at doing Law than handle Machinery-related course. In conclusion, I believe that expanding the university horizon with both females and males is a good step in making sure both get the same opportunity to learn and pursue their dreams, but when it comes to subjects, it depends on the individuals themselves. Everyone should have the right to choose whatever they want to.
Gender equality is such a debating point these days, where
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people
argue and demand for gender equality for every aspect, for such in work, in education and even in household. To
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some
extent it is
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fair
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enough
to demand such a thing since we
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live
in a modern world where both
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men
and
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women
are capable in doing similar tasks.
However
, if we look at this argument which states that tertiary educational institutions should accept the same counts of students for
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female
and male in every subject, there are questions if this is the right initiative in achieving gender equality.

To
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begin
with, I
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agree
that universities should have a diversity in number of students. Back in the days,
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women
are not encouraged to pursue education compared to
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men
since
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men
were
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seen
to be the superior in a household.
For example
, it
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used
to be a law in Pakistan that
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women
were not
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allowed
to study until Malala Yousafzai, who fought for the rights of
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female
learning. In this modern world, it can be
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seen
that there are more
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females
engaging themselves in education.
Hence
, I believe accepting
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different
genders gives a
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good
opportunity.

Nevertheless
, accepting the equal number of
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men
and
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women
in every subject is a bit unnecessary. This is
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because
not all
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men
are capable in certain
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skills
and vice versa.
For instance
,
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some
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men
are fitter to enrol in Engineering course
rather
than Fashion. This
also
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applies to
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women
, where
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some
are better at doing Law than handle Machinery-related course.

In conclusion
, I believe that expanding the university horizon with both
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females
and males is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
step in making sure both
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get
the same opportunity to learn and pursue their dreams,
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but
when it
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comes
to subjects, it depends on the individuals themselves. Everyone should have the right to choose whatever they want to.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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