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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.21

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 21
It's argued whether universities should determine the number of enrolled students according to their gender or not. In fact, Colleges should consider the acceptance of the same number of men and women in every subject. This essay will argue why this is completely preposterous. Despite the fact that males tend to do better at specific school subjects than females, it seems to be fair to give girls an equal chance to learn these subjects. Moreover, providing the same opportunity to both boys and girls could motivate them to prove their potential and show off what they are capable of doing. For Instance, Japan's educational system states that no matter which aspect of learning that is being taught, the number of males and females involved must be exactly the same. Therefore, It seems logical to believe that the distribution based on gender in higher educational institutions should be equal. In contrast, while most males prefer practical subjects, the majority of females tend to master theoretical parts of the curriculum. Moreover, having different interests is not always bad. In fact, it helps both sexes to better understand their nature and even gain more experiences that would have been otherwise impossible to gain if they only had been given similar inconvenient choices. It is for these reasons, it is really unnecessary to consider gender equality a mandatory requirement when accepting university students. In conclusion, some people believe that there should be the same number of boys and girls in any subject in each college. This essay argued why this could be not only totally unnecessary, but also adds no value. In my opinion, it is entirely irrelevant to accept students in different university subjects equally according to their sexes.
It's argued whether universities should determine the
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number
of enrolled students according to their gender or not. In fact, Colleges should consider the acceptance of the same
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number
of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women in every
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subject
. This essay will argue why this is completely preposterous.

Despite the fact that males tend to do better at specific school
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subjects
than females, it seems to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
to give girls an equal chance to learn these
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subjects
.
Moreover
, providing the same opportunity to both boys and girls could motivate them to prove their potential and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
off what they are capable of doing.
For Instance
, Japan's educational system states that no matter which aspect of learning
that is
being taught
, the
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number
of males and females involved
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be exactly the same.
Therefore
, It seems logical to believe that the distribution based on gender in higher educational institutions should be equal.

In contrast
, while most males prefer practical
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subjects
, the majority of females tend to master theoretical parts of the curriculum.
Moreover
, having
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different
interests is not always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
. In fact, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
both sexes to better understand their nature and even gain more experiences that would have been
otherwise
impossible to gain if they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
had been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
similar inconvenient choices. It is for these reasons, it is
really
unnecessary to consider gender equality a mandatory requirement when accepting university students.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
believe that there should be the same
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number
of boys and girls in any
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subject
in each college. This essay argued why this could be not
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only
totally
unnecessary,
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but
also
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adds
no value. In my opinion, it is
entirely
irrelevant to accept students in
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different
university
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subjects
equally
according to their sexes.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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