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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.18

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 18
Gender equality will always remain a controversial topic over subsequent generations. Moreover, it is claimed that universities have to approve the requests of equal numbers of men and women among its students in each matter of study. However, this essay will argue why this is totally unnecessary. Despite some challenges, higher education institutions should accept the same proportion of male and female students in every subject. Furthermore, it must be a significant rule determined by the governments in each country to make sure that everyone gets a fair chance without any prejudice towards a specific gender. For example, in Japan, while a driving class has a significant number of girls, male participants of a dancing lesson constitute almost the same percentage as females. Therefore, colleges must consider sex equality when accepting their candidates. On the contrary, biological differences exist between men and women and this has a natural impact upon their choices. In addition, there is no harm in distributing people so that they can land where they belong without imposing their decisions. For instance, in the USA, professors care more about helping their candidates to figure out who they really are and what they want to be rather than focusing on biological characteristics. Consequently, it's logical that males and females have different academic preferences and it's completely acceptable. To conclude, colleges must consider approving the exact same figures among their male and female applicants in every subject. The essay, however, argued why this is extremely insignificant. In my opinion, this is not what we should really care about, instead, it's totally fine to expect variable figures when it comes to this matter.
Gender equality will always remain a controversial topic over subsequent generations.
Moreover
, it
is claimed
that universities
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have to
approve the requests of equal numbers of
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men
and women among its students in each matter of study.
However
, this essay will argue why this is
totally
unnecessary.

Despite
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some
challenges, higher education institutions should accept the same proportion of male and
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female
students in every subject.
Furthermore
, it
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must
be a significant
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rule
determined by the
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governments
in each country to
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make
sure that everyone
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gets
a
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fair
chance without any prejudice towards a specific gender.
For example
, in Japan, while a driving
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class
has a significant number of girls, male participants of a dancing lesson constitute almost the same percentage as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
.
Therefore
, colleges
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
consider sex equality when accepting their candidates.

On the contrary
, biological differences exist between
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
and women and this has a natural impact upon their choices.
In addition
, there is no harm in distributing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
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so
that they can land where they belong without imposing their decisions.
For instance
, in the USA, professors care more about helping their candidates to figure out
In a formal text, use "whom", not 'who'.
who
they
really
are and what they want to be
rather
than focusing on biological characteristics.
Consequently
, it's logical that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
males
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
have
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different
academic preferences and it's completely acceptable.

To conclude
, colleges
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
consider approving the exact same figures among their male and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
applicants in every subject. The essay,
however
, argued why this is
extremely
insignificant. In my opinion, this is not what we should
really
care about,
instead
, it's
totally
fine to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
variable figures when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to this matter.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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