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Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live.

Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. DN9eE
In today society, there are varieties of food that can have both positive and negative effect on our health. People generally care about their bodies and wish to live a healthy lifestyle however, most of them still enjoy junk and fast food. Eating unhealthy meals has an unfavorable consequence for both individual and the society. Therefore, one of the ways to control is that the government should tax on processed food. In my opinion, I believe it is unfair for ‘fat tax’ as it is the own choice of the consumer. The reason people says that it is a kind of discrimination to make customer to pay for higher price just because the food is not fit for health. This will harm more lower- and middle-class citizens instead of wealthy people because street foods are cheap, accessible, and affordable for everyone. For example, famous fast-food brands such as KFC, McDonald's, Burger King has consistent quality with a reasonable price which almost every level of citizen can enjoy their delicious meal. Therefore, the taxation on unhealthy food directly burden to modest consumer due to price increase which may leads to overpriced. On the other hand, a certain amount of fat tax should be mandatory to control the causes of obesity, heart diseases, stroke, kidney disease, and may finally threaten their life. Thus, the government should intervene by imposing rules and regulations on food to harmonize the consumer behavior within the country. It is some kind of thread for a country if majority of the people enjoy eating unhealthy meals because as an authority, it is necessary to protect the live of each resident. In conclusion, although taxing on fatty cuisines will deprive some certain people who are not affected by its unfavorable effects from purchasing it. However, I think government should focus on more educating the disadvantages of unhealthy meals in public by television, social media, and campaigns.
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today
society, there are varieties of
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food
that can have both
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positive
and
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negative
effect on our health.
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People
generally
care about their bodies and wish to
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live
a healthy lifestyle
however
, most of them
still
enjoy junk and
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fast
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food
. Eating
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unhealthy
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meals
has an unfavorable consequence for both individual and the society.
Therefore
, one of the ways to control is that the
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government
should tax on processed
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food
. In my opinion, I believe it is unfair for ‘
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fat
tax’ as it is the
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own
choice of the consumer.

The reason
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people
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says
that it is a kind of discrimination to
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make
customer to pay for higher price
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just
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because
the
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food
is not fit for health. This will harm
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more lower
- and middle-
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class
citizens
instead
of wealthy
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people
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because
street
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foods
are
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cheap
, accessible, and affordable for everyone.
For example
,
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famous
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fast
-food brands such as KFC, McDonald's, Burger King has consistent quality with a reasonable price which almost every level of citizen can enjoy their delicious
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meal
.
Therefore
, the taxation on
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unhealthy
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food
directly
burden to modest consumer due to price increase which may leads
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to overpriced
.

On the other hand
, a certain amount of
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fat
tax should be mandatory to control the causes of obesity, heart diseases, stroke, kidney disease, and may
finally
threaten their life.
Thus
, the
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government
should intervene by imposing
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rules
and regulations on
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food
to harmonize the consumer behavior within the country. It is
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some
kind of thread for a country if majority of the
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people
enjoy eating
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unhealthy
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meals
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because
as an authority, it is necessary to protect the
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live
of each resident.

In conclusion
, although taxing on fatty cuisines will deprive
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some
certain
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people
who are not
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affected
by its unfavorable effects from purchasing it.
However
, I
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think
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government
should focus on more educating the disadvantages of
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unhealthy
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meals
in public by television, social media, and campaigns.
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IELTS essay Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
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