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‘Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries’ How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today?

Youth unemployment is certainly a worrying challenge for most countries, especially at a time of economic instability and social unrest. However, to say that this is the largest issue is to overlook a range of equally pressing matters, as we will discuss now. It must be admitted that joblessness can undermine a young person’s economic prospects and consequent social mobility. Nevertheless, this issue can be ameliorated by coordinated action between the state and the private sector, as we have seen, for instance, in Canada recently. When this is realized, we can see that other concerns are at least as serious. Foremost among these is perhaps the issue of age demographics, whereby young people bearthe burden for an increasingly elderly population with high longevity. This means that young people will pay higher taxes and work longer hours, possibly forcing them to migrate to countries where this pressure is lower. The effect of this is the ‘brain drain’ situation which can be seen in southern Europe, where young, ambitious people prefer to leave their countries altogether, exacerbating the problem for those remaining. Furthermore, we must remember that a substantial proportion of young people globally face existential threats such as famine, drought or outbreaks of disease. These problems are often caused by (or are compounded by) civil war, political instability or the corruption of people in power locally. Such risks are a danger to their safety in addition to their livelihood, and so would appear to be far more serious than unemployment. To conclude, it seems logical to accept that joblessness is a major challenge for young people. However, persistent trends in demographics among developed countries and the presence of physical dangers in developing countries should be regarded as at least as severe. (290 words) Explanation of the topic vocabulary and examples in Speaking
Youth unemployment is
certainly
a worrying challenge for most
countries
,
especially
at a time

of economic instability and social unrest.
However
, to say that this is the largest issue is to overlook

a range of
equally
pressing matters, as we will discuss
now
.

It
must
be admitted
that joblessness can undermine a
young
person’s economic prospects and

consequent social mobility.
Nevertheless
, this issue can
be ameliorated
by coordinated action

between the state and the private sector, as we have
seen
,
for instance
, in Canada recently. When this

is realized
, we can
see
that other concerns are at least as serious.

Foremost among
these is
perhaps the issue of age demographics, whereby
young
people
bearthe
burden for an
increasingly
elderly population with high longevity. This means that
young
people


will pay higher taxes and work longer hours,
possibly
forcing them to migrate to
countries
where this

pressure is lower. The effect of this is the ‘brain drain’ situation which can be
seen
in
southern Europe
, where
young
, ambitious
people
prefer to
leave
their
countries
altogether, exacerbating the

problem for those remaining.

Furthermore
, we
must
remember that a substantial proportion of
young
people
globally face

existential threats such as famine, drought or outbreaks of disease. These problems are
often


caused by (or
are compounded
by) civil war, political instability or the corruption of
people
in

power
locally
. Such
risks
are a
danger
to their safety
in addition
to their livelihood, and
so
would

appear to be far more serious than unemployment.

To conclude
, it seems logical to accept that joblessness is a major challenge for
young
people
.

However
, persistent trends in demographics among developed
countries
and the presence of physical

dangers
in developing
countries
should
be regarded
as at least as severe.

(290 words)

Explanation of the topic vocabulary and examples in Speaking
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IELTS essay ‘Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries’ How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today?

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  American English
7 paragraphs
300 words
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