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Unemployment is a serious issue throughout the world. What should governments do to solve this issue

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Although unemployment has always existed, it has risen since the last decades, becoming a more relevant social issue, due to a massive people's movement from rural to urban areas, and the growth of technology that replace human skills. Through government measures that regulate human access to the cities as well as promote employment in the countryside could mitigate the lack of job opportunities. The most critical aspects that have boosted unemployment are the overpopulation in cities and technological progress, particularly the higher number of machines in factories. Firstly, the more inhabitants in the towns, the far more competitive it is to get a new job. Unfortunately, people believe there is a various job offer in great cities, but that has changed. According to an economic report of the World Bank, the unemployment rate in 2019 was three times higher than in 2018, and it was associated mainly with overpopulation in big cities. Secondly, it is well-known that the machines not only can perform human tasks, but also even much more efficiently than human beings. For that reason, some car companies such as Ford are producing cars almost totally made by robots. Consequently, hundreds of employees lost their job, showing how technology can negatively affect workers. Strict measures could control the leading causes of unemployment mentioned above aim to moderate individuals' flow from rural areas to big cities. For instance, taking into account skills workers, the local governments would permit entering only workers with a better profile to get a job quickly. In addition, it is not possible to avoid spreading of technology, thus new approaches should encourage less sophisticated jobs in the field. For example, in Argentina, specifically in Buenos Aires province, some subsidies with this objective have kept people away from urban centres and demonstrated a beneficial outcome on a higher employment rate. To conclude, the number of people without a job is rising steadily. Not only overpopulation, but also technological advances are boosting unemployment. Therefore, actions should focus on decreasing movement to the most populated regions and promoting less advanced jobs in rural zones.
Although
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unemployment
has always existed, it has risen since the last decades, becoming a more relevant social issue, due to a massive
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people
's movement from rural to urban areas, and the growth of technology that replace
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human
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skills
. Through
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government
measures that regulate
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human
access to the
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cities
as well
as promote employment in the countryside could mitigate the lack of
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job
opportunities.

The most critical aspects that have boosted
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unemployment
are the overpopulation in
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cities
and technological progress,
particularly
the higher number of machines in factories.
Firstly
, the more inhabitants in the towns, the far more competitive it is to
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get
a new
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job
. Unfortunately,
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people
believe there is a various
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job
offer in great
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cities
,
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but
that has
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changed
. According to an economic report of the World Bank, the
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unemployment
rate in 2019 was three times higher than in 2018, and it
was associated
mainly
with overpopulation in
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big
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cities
.
Secondly
, it is well-known that the machines not
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only
can perform
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human
tasks,
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but
also
even much more
efficiently
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human
beings. For that reason,
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some
car
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companies
such as Ford are producing cars almost
totally
made by robots.
Consequently
, hundreds of employees lost their
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job
, showing how technology can
negatively
affect workers.

Strict measures could control the leading causes of
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unemployment
mentioned above aim to moderate individuals' flow from rural areas to
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big
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cities
.
For instance
, taking into account
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skills
workers, the local
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governments
would permit entering
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only
workers with a better profile to
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get
a
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job
quickly
.
In addition
, it is not possible to avoid spreading of technology,
thus
new approaches should encourage less sophisticated
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jobs
in the field.
For example
, in Argentina,
specifically
in Buenos Aires province,
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some
subsidies with this objective have
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kept
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people
away from urban
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centres
and demonstrated a beneficial outcome on a higher employment rate.

To conclude
, the number of
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people
without a
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job
is rising
steadily
. Not
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only
overpopulation,
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but
also
technological advances are boosting
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unemployment
.
Therefore
, actions should focus on decreasing movement to the most populated regions and promoting less advanced
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jobs
in rural zones.
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IELTS essay Unemployment is a serious issue throughout the world. What should governments do to solve this issue

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