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Undoubtedly, the government should make the priority tasks that should be carried out due to budget constraints

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Undoubtedly, the government should make the priority tasks that should be carried out due to budget constraints. A controversial question has been aroused people's minds whether the government devotes money to constructing new buildings or preserving old buildings? In response to this challenge, opinions are various from one person to another one, several experts advocate and others are opposite. As far as I am concerned it is better to safeguard historical buildings I will elaborate on my reason in the following paragraphs. To begin with, keeping ancient houses have several benefits that the first and the foremost of which increasing the level of welfare. It is dispensable fact that tourist industries are a thriving and interesting activity in the modern era. Every year, many more visitors view landmarks and natural perspectives across the world. As a result, they spend a lot of money not only on visiting ancient places but they purchase diverse handicrafts and pay money on entertainment activities. Consequently, it helps to improve the economic conditions of a country and It leads to reduce the unemployment issue, investing in maintaining the ancient buildings cause to introduce them as a tourist attraction. Hence this performance has no financial burden and the government can earn more money than it has spent. Apart away from tourist attractions, an aged house helps to educate the cultural heritage of country to the children. Admittedly this kind of buildings has a special architect that dated back to a given era. Several of them have Islamic style and others are European ones and use different material. As compared to theoretical material, student can easily compare these constructions with each other and easily identify differentiation Put in brief, according to above mentioned it can concluded that it is better to maintain ancient buildings due to the facts that it make money for government and have a educational base for children.
Undoubtedly
, the
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should
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make
the priority tasks that should
be carried
out due to budget constraints. A controversial question has
been aroused
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people
's minds whether the
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government
devotes
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money
to constructing new
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buildings
or preserving
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old
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buildings
? In response to this challenge, opinions are various from one person to another one, several experts advocate
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and others
are opposite.
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As
far as I
am concerned
it is better to safeguard historical
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buildings
I will elaborate on my reason in the following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, keeping
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ancient
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houses
have several benefits that the
first
and
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the foremost of
which increasing the level of welfare. It is dispensable fact that tourist industries are a thriving and interesting activity in the modern era. Every year,
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many
more visitors view landmarks and natural perspectives across the world.
As a result
, they spend
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a lot of
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money
not
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only
on visiting
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ancient
places
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but
they
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purchase
diverse handicrafts and pay
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money
on entertainment activities.
Consequently
, it
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helps
to
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improve
the economic conditions of a country and It leads to
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reduce
the unemployment issue, investing in maintaining the
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ancient
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buildings
cause to introduce them as a tourist attraction.
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Hence
this performance has no financial burden and the
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government
can earn more
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money
than it has spent.

Apart away from tourist attractions, an aged
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
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helps
to educate the cultural heritage of country to the children.
Admittedly
this kind of
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buildings
has a special architect that dated back to a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
era. Several of them have Islamic style
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and others
are European ones and
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use
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different
material. As compared to theoretical material, student can
easily
compare these constructions with each other and
easily
identify
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differentiation


Put
in brief
, according to above mentioned it can
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concluded
that it is better to maintain
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ancient
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buildings
due to the facts that it
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make
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money
for
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government
and have
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a
educational base for children.
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IELTS essay Undoubtedly, the government should make the priority tasks that should be carried out due to budget constraints

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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