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We must return to the older and more traditional values to create a better world to live in. Agree or disagree?

We must return to the older and more traditional values to create a better world to live in. Agree or disagree? 26DQj
Nowadays, in a new era value was created by a and our ancestors are replaced and formed by new generation. Old values plays a crucial role in our life and must be remain with us. I agree with the about statement. I will put forth my views in the upcoming paragraph. Firstly, the well known and renowned value is honesty this policy is gifted by the older people and plays a important in our life and and as well as business. For example teachers and parents from a very small it made the children to learn honesty. Secondly, loyalty which is thought by our family is major missing in today's world. This principal helps us to be loyal towards our responsibilities. Due to this cheating, fraud and many such cases are increasing. For example nowadays young people are not loyal towards their work watch which is shameful and embarrassing. Futhermore, the value of motivation is lacking in today's world instead of motivating other people to achieve their success, they instead demotive them. They cannot see the success story of other because they are unsuccessful in their own life. On the other hand you new generation accept each and everyone they are not afraid of being different instead they are given respect by all. Unlike before, people were born was either murder or had to live in a different society which was not accepted by the world. For example there were only two section that is men female, but now High Court has given three has given third section to transgender. To sum up, modern values have less impact was compared to the older generation.
Nowadays, in a new era
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are replaced
and formed by new generation.
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values plays a crucial role in our life and
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with us. I
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agree
with the about statement. I will put forth my views in the upcoming paragraph.

Firstly
, the well known and renowned
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value
is honesty this policy
is gifted
by the older
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people
and plays
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in our life
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and and
as well
as business.
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teachers and parents from a
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very
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small
it made the children to learn honesty.
Secondly
, loyalty which is
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thought
by our family is major missing in
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today
's world. This principal
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helps
us to be loyal towards our responsibilities. Due to this cheating, fraud and
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many
such cases are increasing.
For example
nowadays young
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people
are not loyal towards their work
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watch
which is shameful and embarrassing.
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Futhermore
, the
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value
of motivation is lacking in
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today
's world
instead
of motivating other
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people
to achieve their success, they
instead
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demotive
them. They cannot
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see
the success story of other
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they are unsuccessful in their
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own
life.

On the other hand
you
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new
generation accept each and
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everyone
they are not afraid of being
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different
instead
they are
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given
respect by all. Unlike
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before
,
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people
were born
was either murder or had to
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live
in a
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different
society which was not
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accepted
by the world.
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there were
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only
two
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section
that is
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men
female,
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but
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now
High Court has
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given
three has
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third section to transgender. To sum up, modern values have less impact
was compared
to the older generation.
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IELTS essay We must return to the older and more traditional values to create a better world to live in. Agree or disagree?

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