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These days, advertisement has been playing a vital role in our society, which is associated with people in every country, in fact, in developing countries such as Thailand, Vietnam and Myanmar, to name a few. If we are asked to clarify the mentioned trend by the current situation, it would be difficult to make a definite answer. However, from my perspective, some reasons from my personal ideas will be clarified in the following paragraphs. First and foremost, most advertisement businesses have been collecting data for a decade, in order to know consumers’ behaviour and create the advertising to grab their attention. As we can see, nowadays, people like to experience new products and test new services. For this reason, that nations just have many choices to choose from the markets. Moreover, from the discovery process, almost every business owner have conducted market research because they want to make sure about the uniqueness and eliminate marketing competitors as many as they can before they start the production process. When it comes to the development term, I think this way of advertisement will provide a lot of new innovation and creativity in the market because the companies work harder to find new solutions and the way to present their products. In fact, now we are driven by technology, everything comes and goes faster. Thus, the companies are more likely to invest in advertising agencies and pay for product placement, in order to keep their products in consumer’s attention. However, sometimes those advertising can lead consumers to information overload because they get too much information per day. From my point of view, a good example for the development of advertising is Facebook Ads because the presented products were generated by personal data and interest, which is more personalized and tailored To summarise, the products that we can see from many places are all gone through many processes and presented in the best way. Thus, we should be aware before purchasing and think twice.
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people
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developing countries
such as Thailand, Vietnam and Myanmar, to name a few. If we
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current
situation, it would be difficult to
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make
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some
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ideas
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be clarified
in the following paragraphs.

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and foremost, most advertisement businesses have been collecting data for a decade, in order to know consumers’
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behaviour
and create the advertising to grab their attention. As we can
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see
, nowadays,
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people
like to experience
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new
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products
and
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test
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new
services.
For this reason
, that nations
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just
have
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many
choices to choose from the markets.
Moreover
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because
they want to
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make
sure about the uniqueness and eliminate marketing competitors as
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many
as they can
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before
they
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start
the production process.

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to the development term, I
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think
this way of advertisement will provide
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a lot of
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new
innovation and creativity in the market
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because
the
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companies
work harder to find
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new
solutions and the way to present their
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products
. In fact,
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now
we
are driven
by technology, everything
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comes
and goes faster.
Thus
, the
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companies
are more likely to invest in advertising agencies and pay for
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product
placement, in order to
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keep
their
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products
in consumer’s attention.
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,
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sometimes
those advertising can lead consumers to information overload
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because
they
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get
too much information per day. From my point of view, a
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good
example for the development of advertising is Facebook Ads
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because
the presented
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products
were generated
by personal data and interest, which is more personalized and
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tailored


To
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summarise
, the
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products
that we can
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see
from
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many
places are all gone through
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many
processes and presented in the best way.
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, we should be aware
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before
purchasing and
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think
twice.
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IELTS essay These days, advertisement has been playing

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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