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Under certain situations, people who break the law should get warning instead of receiving punishment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Under certain situations, people who break the law should get warning instead of receiving punishment. w7xx3
Nowadays, people have different opinions on punishing offenders. Some people believe that everyone who violates the rules must be punished, while others oppose this view. Obviously, this view is one-sided. There is a line between those who should be punished and those who should not. First of all, many people believe that if a person goes to jail, it means that he is a criminal. This causes other people not to want to and will not associate with that person and be socially isolated if the person was misjudged, imprisoned, or maybe a minor driving violation. Therefore, this will completely change his life, and he will become a person worthless to society. In addition, in many cases, during the trial, they will always have to withstand the review and questioning from the prosecutor, which will bring them huge psychological pressure. Even if these people are released from prison, it is difficult to re-adjust to social life. On the other hand, violent crimes such as murder or sexual abuse require severe punishment because these criminals have seriously violated morals and laws and disrupted social order. If criminals successfully escape punishment, no one can guarantee that they will not harm other innocent citizens, and they must be isolated from social life. This directly shows that in order to maintain discipline and social order, offenders should be punished appropriately. In other words, after forgiving their criminals, they can continue to ignore the law, repeat the same mistakes, and once again directly affect the safety of civilians. In conclusion, it is essential for law enforcement officers to carefully analyze each type of violation before executing any type of trial. In some cases, warning offenders is more decisive than punishing them. However, for people who commit serious crimes or commit crimes frequently, the best option is to prosecute them and impose strict penalties.
Nowadays,
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people
have
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different
opinions on punishing offenders.
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Some
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people
believe that everyone
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who
violates the
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rules
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must
be punished
, while others oppose this view.
Obviously
, this view is one-sided. There is a line between those
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who
should
be punished
and those
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who
should not.

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First of all
,
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many
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people
believe that if a
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person
goes to jail, it means that he is a
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criminal
. This causes
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other
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people
not to want to and will not associate with that
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person
and be
socially
isolated if the
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person
was misjudged
, imprisoned, or maybe a minor driving violation.
Therefore
, this will completely
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change
his life, and he will become a
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person
worthless to society.
In addition
, in
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many
cases, during the trial, they will always
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have to
withstand the review and questioning from the prosecutor, which will bring them huge psychological pressure. Even if these
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people
are released
from prison, it is difficult to re-adjust to
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social
life.

On the
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other
hand, violent crimes such as murder or sexual abuse require severe punishment
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because
these
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criminals
have
seriously
violated morals and laws and disrupted
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social
order. If
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criminals
successfully
escape punishment, no one can guarantee that they will not harm
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other
innocent citizens, and they
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must
be isolated
from
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social
life. This
directly
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shows
that in order to maintain discipline and
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social
order, offenders should
be punished
appropriately
. In
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other
words, after forgiving their
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criminals
, they can continue to
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ignore
the law, repeat the same mistakes, and once again
directly
affect the safety of civilians.

In conclusion
, it is essential for law enforcement officers to
carefully
analyze each type of violation
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before
executing any type of trial.
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In
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some
cases, warning offenders is more decisive than punishing them.
However
, for
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people
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who
commit serious crimes or commit crimes
frequently
, the best option is to prosecute them and impose strict penalties.
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IELTS essay Under certain situations, people who break the law should get warning instead of receiving punishment.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.5
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