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The given pictures illustrate the alterations that have occurred in the art gallery since 2015

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The given pictures illustrate the alterations that have occurred in the art gallery since 2015. As is reveal from the pictures, overall, it is obvious that the most significant variations have taken place in the west, whereas there have been little of transformations in the middle and east over the period of 6 years. To be more specific, the café in the northwestern corner of the art gallery has been transformed into the new gallery shop since 2015. Besides, the gallery office to the south of the cafe in 2015 has been demolished to give room for the space that included the vending machine after 6 years. Moreover, there was the conversion of the fourth exhibition room in the southwest of the region into the Tempolary exhibition and children’ area in the same period. On the other hand, while the stairs in the north of the gallery have been relocated to the west to make way for the elevator, the reception to the east of the old gallery office has been moved to the middle of the area since 2015. Finally, the one, second and third exhibition room in the east have witnessed no changes in their location throughout the given time frame.
The
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pictures illustrate the alterations that have occurred in the art
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gallery
since 2015.

As is reveal from the pictures,
overall
, it is obvious that the most significant variations have taken place in the west, whereas there have been
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little
of transformations in the middle and east over the period of 6 years.

To be more specific, the café in the northwestern corner of the art
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gallery
has
been transformed
into the new
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gallery
shop since 2015.
Besides
, the
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gallery
office to the south of the
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cafe
in 2015 has
been demolished
to give room for the space that included the vending machine after 6 years.
Moreover
, there was the conversion of the fourth exhibition room in the southwest of the region into the
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Tempolary
exhibition and children’ area in the same period.

On the other hand
, while the stairs in the north of the
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gallery
have
been relocated
to the west to
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make
way for the elevator, the reception to the east of the
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old
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gallery
office has been
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moved
to the middle of the area since 2015.
Finally
, the one, second and third exhibition room in the east have witnessed no
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changes
in their location throughout the
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given
time frame.
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IELTS essay The given pictures illustrate the alterations that have occurred in the art gallery since 2015

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
203 words
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