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Most of the people are addicted with the phones. Wherever they go mobiles are the essential thing to Carry but usage of mobile phones during some events and places can create disturbance for other people and because of that reason some individuals believe that use of mobile phones should be restricted in public places and I don’t totally agree with the argument of banning this device in public places. In the next few paragraphs, I will put some points to support my opinion. There are many negative consequences of using mobile phone in public areas. Firstly, sounds or ringtones of phones may break concentration of surrounding people who are doing something with focus. Secondly, our way of talking during phone calls such as screaming or talking loudly can disturb people around us. For example, if students are trying to study peacefully in library and act of someone like that can interrupt their focus. Thirdly, make use of phones while driving can draw attention of driver from roads and may become the cause of accidents. However, nowadays phones have very useful features which make our lives convenient. Firstly, to make payments in shops, hotels, hospitals phones are required. Secondly, mobiles are very useful in studying. Therefore, not only usage of phones except taking on the calls should be allowed but strict guideline of keeping phones in silent mode should be followed. To conclude, phones have numerous advantages as well as disadvantages but appropriate usage of phones should be allowed or banned based on the places.
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people
are addicted
with the
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phones
. Wherever they go mobiles are the essential thing to Carry
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but
usage of mobile
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phones
during
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some
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events
and
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places
can create disturbance for other
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people
and
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because
of that reason
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some
individuals believe that
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use
of mobile
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phones
should
be restricted
in public
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places
and I don’t
totally
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agree
with the argument of banning this device in public
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places
. In the
next
few paragraphs, I will put
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some
points to support my opinion.

There are
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many
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negative
consequences of using mobile
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phone
in public areas.
Firstly
, sounds or ringtones of
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phones
may break concentration of surrounding
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people
who are doing something with focus.
Secondly
, our way of talking during
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phone
calls such as screaming or talking
loudly
can disturb
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people
around us.
For example
, if students are trying to study
peacefully
in library and act of someone like that can interrupt their focus.
Thirdly
,
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make
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use
of
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phones
while driving can draw attention of driver from roads and may become the cause of accidents.

However
, nowadays
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phones
have
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very
useful features which
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make
our
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lives
convenient.
Firstly
, to
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make
payments in shops, hotels, hospitals
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phones
are required
.
Secondly
, mobiles are
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very
useful in studying.
Therefore
, not
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only
usage of
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phones
except taking on the calls should be
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allowed
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but
strict guideline of keeping
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phones
in silent mode should
be followed
.

To conclude
,
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phones
have numerous advantages
as well
as disadvantages
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but
appropriate usage of
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phones
should be
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allowed
or banned based on the
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places
.
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IELTS essay udhf uwrfiwf aweufjedfndcfjade fjidjcfdsikeaw ijusndcffhweufqeif wiehfv vnwidfwief iwehfcnjvdjvjsdwiejfv iwjvnjvqoifjeuwjncwdnv nnnn knfwj

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  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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