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Type of the tourism distinations in Harbour City Tourism

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The bar chart show information about number of the people travel to Harbour city from 1970 to 2000. Overall, what can be stand the chart was that, the largest percentage became Coastal hotel occupancy with about 90 percent in 1985, as opposed to in 2000, it showed as less as result with under 20. Looking at the details, as regards, most people used from train for rail travel with 60 percent in the beginning of the period, as opposed to the number of users of train fell to a low of only upper 20 in 2000. People the most used from Coastal hotel occupancy in 1985. It reached a peak of approximately 90 percent, whereas in 2000 it showed very less result with under 20. If we look at the Adventure tourism, it achieved to under 60 percent in the end of the period, while Advanture Tourism fell to a low of only 20 percent. City hotel occupancy reached to a peak with 80 percent in 1985. In 1970 raiting of City hotel occupancy showed a low of figure in the beginning of tourism in Harbour. Air travel reached to peak in 2000 with under 80 percent.
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information about number of the
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people
travel to
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Harbour
city from 1970 to 2000.
Overall
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the chart was that, the largest percentage became Coastal
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hotel
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occupancy
with about 90
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percent
in 1985, as opposed to in 2000, it
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showed
as
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less
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result with under 20. Looking at the
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details
, as regards, most
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people
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used
from train for rail travel with 60
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percent
in the beginning of the period, as opposed to the number of users of train fell to a low of
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only
upper 20 in 2000.
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People
the most
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used
from Coastal
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hotel
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occupancy
in 1985. It reached a peak of approximately 90
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, whereas in 2000 it
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showed
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less result with under 20. If we look at the Adventure tourism, it achieved to under 60
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in the
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end
of the period, while
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Advanture
Tourism fell to a low of
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only
20
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. City
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hotel
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occupancy
reached to a peak with 80
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percent
in 1985. In 1970
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raiting
of City
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a low of figure in the beginning of tourism in
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. Air travel reached to peak in 2000 with under 80
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IELTS essay Type of the tourism distinations in Harbour City Tourism

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