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ttending university we can learn knowledge and skills that required to find a job.

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Personally for me, attending university we can learn knowledge and skills that required to find a job. Especially, knowledges like finance, IT, markerting, architecture, etc, and skills like interpersonal and team working. Also we can participate in extracurricular activities to have hands-on experience and practical skills. not only that college can provide us an enviroment to accumulate knowledge about different fields. We can bulid a relationship with your friends who maybe your colleague or your partnership in the future. University will give you formal qualifications to help you easier to be in employment. If we scored good grades university would give us a scholarship. In conclusion, there are many benefis which might help us why we should pursing university education
Personally
for me, attending
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we can learn knowledge and
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skills
that required to find a job.
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knowledges
like finance, IT,
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markerting
, architecture, etc, and
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skills
like interpersonal and team working.
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Also
we can participate in extracurricular activities to have hands-on experience and practical
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skills
.
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that college can provide us an
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enviroment
to accumulate knowledge about
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different
fields. We can
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bulid
a relationship with your friends who maybe your colleague or your partnership in the future.
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University
will give you formal qualifications to
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help
you easier to be in employment.
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If
we scored
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good
grades
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university
would give us a scholarship.
In conclusion
, there are
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benefis
which might
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help
us why we should
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pursing
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university
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education
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IELTS essay ttending university we can learn knowledge and skills that required to find a job.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
119 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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