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Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.2

Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. v. 2
There is no doubt that these days tour guider is an available choice for travelling and it is wide spreading with a group. The question is, is transported with a group of people, including a tourist guider the best way? In this essay, I am going to discuss my opinion and draw my own conclusion. In terms on the positive side, being grouped to travel worldwide is quite funny, it lets you communicate with a lot of travellers who are interested in the same place as you are visiting. The main reason given to support this claim is that people enjoying meeting new societies and nations. To illustrate, if you travelled with your friends usually, you would feel less excited, which leads you the opportunity to start a new chat with strangers. In other words, tourists are for helping people to keep providing themselves to be knowledgeable. For example, guidelines comprise information, but it is not necessary to follow the instructions. However, on the other hand, there are disadvantages of transporting with a tourist. First of all, extroverts are discomfort whenever they are in public. Put differently, chatting with strangers might not go so well after all. It might be a start of a trouble. Secondly, there is a limited time in each place, that could not be enough. This is because visitors are more likely to be explorers. Also, people like to be in a relaxing place with a quiet atmosphere. Hence, groups could be too noisy. In conclusion, although it is said that travelling with a company and a tourist guide can be harmful and boring. I believe that it is the best way to travel, especially to cities and historic places.
There is no doubt that these days tour guider is an available choice for travelling and it is wide spreading with a group. The question is,
is transported
with a group of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, including a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourist
guider the best way? In this essay, I am going to discuss my opinion and draw my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
conclusion.

In terms on the
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positive
side,
being grouped
to travel worldwide is quite
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funny
, it
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lets
you communicate with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
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travellers
who
are interested
in the same
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place
as you are visiting. The main reason
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to support this claim is that
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people
enjoying meeting new societies and nations. To illustrate, if you travelled with your friends
usually
, you would feel less excited, which leads you the opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
a new chat with strangers.
In other words
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
are for helping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
providing themselves to be knowledgeable.
For example
, guidelines comprise information,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it is not necessary to follow the instructions.

However
,
on the other hand
, there are disadvantages of transporting with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourist
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, extroverts are discomfort whenever they are in public. Put
differently
, chatting with strangers might not go
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
well
after all
. It might be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
of a trouble.
Secondly
, there is a limited time in each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
, that could not be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
visitors are more likely to be explorers.
Also
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
like to be in a relaxing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
with a quiet atmosphere.
Hence
, groups could be too noisy.

In conclusion
, although it
is said
that travelling with a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourist
guide can be harmful and boring. I believe that it is the best way to travel,
especially
to cities and historic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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