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Traveling through air is increasing now a days. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of traveling through air. v.1

Traveling through air is increasing now a days. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of traveling through air. v. 1
Nowadays the business of touring and travelling is becoming increasingly popular. An increasing number of people prefer to travel using an aeroplane rather than any other modes of transport. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of commuting through the air. The biggest benefit of commuting through plane is speed. Most of the aircraft's now a day's travel at much higher speed than any other mode of transport. To illustrate this, in order to go from New York to London through plane, it takes 10 hours; however, the same journey takes around 13 days when travelling through the sea. Thus, using aeroplane is much more convenient and fast, as compared to any other means of transport. This result's in people spending their time on important things, rather than getting exhausted in commute. However, air travel does have a drawback in air pollution. The power required for a plane to take off and fly to its destination requires a huge amount of fuel to be burnt. For instance, it is estimated that 13 million flights take place every year, this causes a huge stress on the environment. Furthermore, airports are required for air planes and these often causes stress to locals. For example, the noise pollution generated by aeroplane's could prevent locals from sleeping peacefully. To conclude, air travel is becoming increasingly common these days. This essay discussed that although commuting through the air has a benefit of travelling fast and convenient, but it can cause negative impact on the environment and can cause sleep disturbance in locals.
Nowadays the business of touring and travelling is becoming
increasingly
popular. An increasing number of
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people
prefer to
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travel
using an
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aeroplane
rather
than any other modes of transport. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of commuting
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through
the air.

The biggest benefit of commuting
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through
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plane
is speed
. Most of the aircraft's
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now
a day's
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travel
at much higher speed than any other mode of transport. To illustrate this, in order to go from New York to London
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through
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plane
, it takes 10 hours;
however
, the same journey takes around 13 days when travelling
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through
the sea.
Thus
, using
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aeroplane
is much more convenient and
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fast
, as compared to any other means of transport. This result's in
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people
spending their time on
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important
things,
rather
than getting exhausted in commute.

However
,
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air
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travel
does have a drawback in
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air
pollution. The power required for a
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plane
to take off and
fly
to its destination requires a huge amount of fuel to
be burnt
.
For instance
, it
is estimated
that 13 million flights take place every year, this
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causes
a huge
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stress
on the environment.
Furthermore
, airports
are required
for
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air
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planes
and these
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often
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causes
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stress
to locals.
For example
, the noise pollution generated by
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aeroplane
's could
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prevent
locals from sleeping
peacefully
.

To conclude
,
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air
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travel
is becoming
increasingly
common these days. This essay discussed that although commuting
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through
the
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air
has a benefit of travelling
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fast
and convenient,
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but
it can
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cause
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negative
impact on the environment and can
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cause
sleep disturbance in locals.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Traveling through air is increasing now a days. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of traveling through air. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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