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The majority of people travel for different reasons and their decision is influenced by the purpose of the travel. Some people believe that traveling domestically is easier and more convenient than traveling to foreign countries. While others argue that v.1

The majority of people travel for different reasons and their decision is influenced by the purpose of the travel. Some people believe that traveling domestically is easier and more convenient than traveling to foreign countries. While others argue that v. 1
First impression plays an important role in analysing one’s character. Some people believe that they can learn a lot more details about a person’s behaviour and culture from the clothes that they wear. This essay will discuss the reasons which cause people to behave and think that way and why I disagree with such instant predictions. Generally, there is a wide spread stereotyping associated with the way someone dresses. This is driven by what everyone subconsciously perceives in the real world and what is projected on them. Furthermore, people generally believe that someone wearing a formal suit is a professional and can be trusted in their work. Mainly, this stems from their exposure in the real world. For example, professionals in the banking industry are always seen wearing suit and are considered to be responsible individuals. Also, doctors need to be dressed professionally to gain trust and confidence fro the patient. So these factors superficially make people believe that they could tell someone’s character and culture from the way they are dressed. The choice of one’s dressing greatly depends on various factors and their lifestyle. It is highly influenced by the place where they are living and not by the character, work and weather forces them to wear certain type of dresses. For example, someone living is a cold place like Canada would prefer to wear clothes that are warmer and this has nothing to do with their character or culture. Furthermore, certain job demand them to be dressed in a specific way. One clear example is, a doctor need to be dressed professionally to gain trust and confidence of their patient. In conclusion, Work and place of living mainly drive the choice of dressing and does not reflect a person’s character or their culture. Hence, I completely disagree with the assumption that one’s culture and character could be predicted from the way they dress.
First
impression plays an
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important
role in
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analysing
one’s
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character
.
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Some
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people
believe that they can learn a lot more
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details
about a person’s
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behaviour
and
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culture
from the clothes that they wear. This essay will discuss the reasons which cause
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people
to behave and
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think
that way and why I disagree with such instant predictions.

Generally
, there is a wide spread stereotyping associated with the way
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someone
dresses. This
is driven
by what everyone
subconsciously
perceives in the real world and what
is projected
on them.
Furthermore
,
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people
generally
believe that
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someone
With the word 'that' in a subjunctive clause, use the base form of a verb: "wear".
wearing
a formal suit is a professional and can
be trusted
in their work.
Mainly
, this stems from their exposure in the real world.
For example
, professionals in the banking industry are always
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seen
wearing suit and
are considered
to be responsible individuals.
Also
, doctors need to
be dressed
professionally
to gain trust and confidence
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fro
the patient.
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So
these factors
superficially
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make
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people
believe that they could
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tell
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someone’s
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character
and
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culture
from the way they
are dressed
.

The choice of one’s dressing
greatly
depends on various factors and their lifestyle. It is
highly
influenced by the place where they are living and not by the
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character
, work and weather forces them to wear certain type of dresses.
For example
,
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someone
living is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
place like Canada would prefer to wear clothes that are warmer and this has nothing to do with their
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character
or
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culture
.
Furthermore
, certain job demand them to
be dressed
Consider replacing "in a specific way" with the adverb for "specific"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a specific way
. One
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clear
example is, a doctor need to
be dressed
professionally
to gain trust and confidence of their patient.

In conclusion
, Work and place of living
mainly
drive the choice of dressing and does not reflect a person’s
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character
or their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
.
Hence
, I completely disagree with the assumption that one’s
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culture
and
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character
could
be predicted
from the way they dress.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay The majority of people travel for different reasons and their decision is influenced by the purpose of the travel. Some people believe that traveling domestically is easier and more convenient than traveling to foreign countries. While others argue that v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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