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traffic jams are a serious problem

traffic jams are a serious problem RRajM
Nowadays, most people use private cars rather than public transportation. Causing traffic congestion is a problem of many cities in many countries. First of all, Because most people come to live in a large city or capital, for example, Thailand is Bangkok. England is London Because the capital is a center in many areas, whether it is trade, work, education, transportation that is different from the provinces. including the welfare of the people's life.
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IELTS essay traffic jams are a serious problem

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
74 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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