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attending live event or watching it on television

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I would like to attend music concerts live and watch sports events in television. It will be good if we watch live concert we can enjoy a lot and cheer up in crowd watch our favorite stars closely. by watching it in television we won't enjoy it much rather watching sports events in television is suggestable we can have snacks relax in home and watch every highlights clearly in television, I conclude that watching concerts live and sports events in television will be better.
I would like to attend music concerts
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sports
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events
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television
. It will be
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good
if we
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watch
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concert we can enjoy a lot and cheer up in crowd
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watch
our favorite stars
closely
.
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by
watching it in
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television
we won't enjoy it much
rather
watching sports
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events
in
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television
is
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suggestable
we can have snacks relax in home and
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watch
every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "highlight"?
highlights
clearly
in television,

I conclude that watching concerts
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live
and sports
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events
in
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television
will be better.
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IELTS essay attending live event or watching it on television

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
84 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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