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Children these day have an unhealthy life school or parent should responsibility

Children these day have an unhealthy life school or parent should responsibility OR2PE
Most children today lead an unhealthy lifestyle. Solving these problems is undoubtedly the responsibility of the parents. Schools should be concerned about these issues and take responsibility for resolving them. One of the key issues in today's society is the inevitable unhealthy lifestyle. Unfortunately, children are also affected by this problem. Because most parents are obsessed with living a healthy lifestyle. Parents should bear responsibility for their children's bad lives since it is their responsibility to ensure their children's health and cleanliness. Schools, in my opinion, should bear the same level of accountability because they are where students spend the majority of their time. Their parents pay for their children's education, socialisation, and health care. As a result, schools must take care of and be accountable for children's health. Aside from parents and schools, the youngster should also be held accountable. to maintain a healthy physique All of the body's systems are working properly and effectively. as well as in order to avoid becoming ill on a regular basis
Most children
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today
lead an unhealthy lifestyle. Solving these problems is
undoubtedly
the
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responsibility
of the
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parents
. Schools should
be concerned
about these issues and take
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responsibility
for resolving them. One of the key issues in
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today
's society is the inevitable unhealthy lifestyle. Unfortunately, children are
also
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affected
by this problem.
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Because
most
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parents
are obsessed
with living a healthy lifestyle.

Parents should bear
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responsibility
for their
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children's
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bad
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lives
since it is their
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responsibility
to ensure their
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children's
health and cleanliness.

Schools, in my opinion, should bear the same level of accountability
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because
they are where students spend the majority of their time. Their
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parents
pay for their
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children's
education,
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socialisation
, and health care.
As a result
, schools
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must
take care of and be accountable for
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children's
health.

Aside from
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parents
and schools, the youngster should
also
be held
accountable.
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to
maintain a healthy physique
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All of the
body's systems are working
properly
and
effectively
.
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as
well as in order to avoid becoming ill on a regular
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basis

IELTS essay Children these day have an unhealthy life school or parent should responsibility

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
168 words
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