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Traffic congestion is a serious problem

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As cities continue to grow, especially in developing countries, their streets are becoming increasingly congested. While in many cases the situation is so severe that traffic often grinds to a halt, there are some measures that can be taken to try to address this issue. One of the major causes of traffic congestion is simply a lack of space. Cities in developing countries are expanding so rapidly and contain so many people that room for new roads to handle this new growth is not available. Narrow streets that used to contain mainly bicycles, motorbikes, and just a few cars are now clogged with the latter. Another factor is the growing wealth of city dwellers. Purchasing a car is one – if not the most common – way to show off this new prosperity. As the number of people who are able to afford a car rises dramatically, cars have begun to swallow the space that used to be able to accommodate many more smaller forms of transportation. In order to solve this problem, there needs to be strict financial disincentives for deciding to drive a car. If someone wants to take up so much extra space every day, they should be forced to pay an extra tax that can be used to improve transport infrastructure and develop public transportation. It should be clear that more and better public transportation is the best option. Once a city reaches a certain size, extra roads are not a solution. Admittedly, some people dislike being forced to use public transport, but it must be seen as the price for living in a city and being able to enjoy the opportunities that urban centres provide. Overall, while economic and population growth have led to massive problems with traffic, there are some practical steps that can be taken to improve the situation. More roads is only a temporary solution. What is needed is a huge investment in modern public transport systems and a strong penalty for those who wish to drive their own cars so that traffic can flow and life can be better for everyone.
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cities
continue to grow,
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developing countries
, their streets are becoming
increasingly
congested. While in
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many
cases the situation is
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so
severe that
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traffic
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often
grinds to a halt, there are
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some
measures that can
be taken
to try to address this issue.

One of the major causes of
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traffic
congestion is
simply
a lack of space.
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Cities
in
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developing countries
are expanding
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so
rapidly
and contain
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so
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many
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people
that room for new roads to handle this new growth is not available. Narrow streets that
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used
to contain
mainly
bicycles, motorbikes, and
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just
a few
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cars
are
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now
clogged with the latter.

Another factor is the growing wealth of city dwellers. Purchasing a
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car
is one
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–
if not the most common
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–
way to
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show
off this new prosperity. As the number of
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people
who are able to afford a
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car
rises
dramatically
,
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cars
have begun to swallow the space that
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used
to be able to accommodate
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many
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more smaller
forms of transportation.

In order to solve this problem, there needs to be strict financial disincentives for deciding to drive a
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car
. If someone wants to take up
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so
much extra space every day, they should
be forced
to pay an extra tax that can be
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used
to
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improve
transport infrastructure and develop
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public
transportation.

It should be
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clear
that more and better
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public
transportation is the best option. Once a city reaches a certain size, extra roads are not a solution.
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,
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some
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people
dislike
being forced
to
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use
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public
transport,
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but
it
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must
be
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seen
as the price for living in a city and being able to enjoy the opportunities that urban
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centres
provide.

Overall
, while economic and population growth have led to massive problems with
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traffic
, there are
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some
practical steps that can
be taken
to
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improve
the situation. More roads is
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only
a temporary solution. What
is needed
is a huge investment in modern
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public
transport systems and a strong penalty for those who wish to drive their
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own
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cars
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so
that
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traffic
can flow and life can be better for everyone.
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IELTS essay Traffic congestion is a serious problem

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
350 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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