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Traffic congestion is a growing problem in many of the world's major cities. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions. v.4

Traffic congestion is a growing problem in many of the world's major cities. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions. v. 4
Nowadays, traffic is the most important concern to metropolises. Overusing the transport system makes it vulnerable and causes some problems. Although rapidly increasing traffic issues, there are ways to tackle them. First of all, urban sprawl and unplanned urban growth have a significant negative impact on transportation system. This is because migration to big cities from suburbs is growing faster than before, confusing people to commute in overcrowded cities. For example, in the city where I live, we do not have either locomotive networks or public buses, only the mode of transportation is private cars. While the number of car users is going up, the roads are getting congested worst. To solve this problem, city authorities should devise urbanization programs and insufficient number of roads need to be widened. As a result, urban growth will be controlled and new routes will keep the traffic flowing. Secondly, another issue is substandard road conditions. For instance, in Astana, the capital of Kazakhstan, the quality of roads is below a satisfactory standard, so that the roads tend to get damaged, making difficult to use them for commuters. To tackle this problem, the government should allocate more budget on roadway constructions and also safe network of walking and cycling routes would be introduced to people in order to encourage public to use bikes instead of cars. As a result, city dwellers will use high standard roads, avoiding car accidents which most happen because of the quality of roads. In conclusion, unless the authorities implement the method to solve these problems, traffic will be continued.
Nowadays,
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traffic
is the most
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important
concern to metropolises. Overusing the transport system
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makes
it vulnerable and causes
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some
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problems
. Although
rapidly
increasing
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traffic
issues, there are ways to tackle them.

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First of all
, urban sprawl and unplanned urban growth have a significant
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negative
impact on transportation system. This is
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because
migration to
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big
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cities
from suburbs is growing faster than
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before
, confusing
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people
to commute in overcrowded
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cities
.
For example
, in the city where I
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live
, we do not have either locomotive networks or public buses,
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only
the mode of transportation is private
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cars
. While the number of
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car
users is going up, the
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roads
are getting congested worst. To solve this
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problem
, city authorities should devise urbanization programs and insufficient number of
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roads
need to
be widened
.
As a result
, urban growth will
be controlled
and new routes will
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keep
the
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traffic
flowing.

Secondly
, another issue is substandard
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road
conditions.
For instance
, in Astana, the capital of Kazakhstan, the quality of
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roads
is below a satisfactory standard,
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so
that the
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roads
tend to
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get
damaged, making difficult to
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use
them for commuters. To tackle this
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problem
, the
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government
should allocate more budget on roadway constructions and
also
safe network of walking and cycling routes would
be introduced
to
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people
in order to encourage public to
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use
bikes
instead
of
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cars
.
As a result
, city dwellers will
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use
high standard
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roads
, avoiding
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car
accidents which most happen
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because
of the quality of roads.

In conclusion
, unless the authorities implement the method to solve these
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problems
,
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traffic
will
be continued
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Traffic congestion is a growing problem in many of the world's major cities. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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