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Traffic congestion in many cities around the world is severe.

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Traffic congestion in many cities around the world is severe. One possible solution to this problem is to impose heavy taxes on car drivers and use this money to make public transport better. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of such a measure. One of the first benefits of such a measure is that the heavy taxes would discourage car owners from using their cars because it would become very expensive to drive. This would mean that they would begin to make use of public transport instead, thus reducing traffic problems and pollution as well. Another benefit would be that much more use would be made of public transport if it was improved. It is often the case that public transport in cities is very poor. For example, we often see old buses and trains that people would rather not use. High taxes would generate enough money to make the necessary changes.
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cities around the world is severe. One possible solution to this problem is to impose heavy taxes on car drivers and
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better. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of such a measure.

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expensive to drive. This would mean that they would
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if it was
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the case that
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in cities is
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buses and trains that
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IELTS essay Traffic congestion in many cities around the world is severe.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
154 words
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