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Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on working like fe to what extent do you agree to this statement

Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on working like fe to what extent QLwWx
Major of people believe that women are finer in raising a children rather than men because the children have more felling with their mother. On the other hand another group people assume that ladies are not good at working life. This essay will discuss both circumstances and give evidence why I agree with this statement It is clear that women are better at taking responsibility of children. However, children are mainly connected with their mother. Children and mother both have trumendous felling and for that children share any draconian situation with their mother; for instance, children and mother both are connected with each other since from childhood. Mother know all the weeknees and strongest parth of their baby. That's why mother are good at raising children. On the flip side minor people belive that women are not best at working life, however, ladies have vast knowledge about their family and children for that they do not have much Idea about job. Ladies face more draconian situation then man because man play significant role in working life. Men can overcome any harsh situation in society. For instance in working life there is a different stages and in all stages work get hard and for that women can face it because they also have responsibility of their family at home and they could not much work then man. As a result women is not good at job In conclusion, I conclude that women are better at raising children but in working life the women role get dropped down and for this. I agree with this statement that women are finer at home but not at job
Major of
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believe that
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are finer in raising a
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children
rather
than
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men
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because
the
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children
have more felling with their
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mother
.
On the other hand
another group
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people
assume that ladies are not
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good
at
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working
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life
. This essay will discuss both circumstances and give evidence why I
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agree
with this
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statement


It is
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clear
that
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women
are better at taking responsibility of
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children
.
However
,
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children
are
mainly
connected with their
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mother
.
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Children
and
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mother
both have
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trumendous
felling and for that
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children
share any
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draconian
situation with their
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mother
;
for instance
,
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children
and
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mother
both
are connected
with each other since from childhood.
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Mother
know all the
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weeknees
and strongest
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parth
of their baby. That's why
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mother
are
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good
at raising children.

On the flip side minor
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people
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belive
that
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women
are not best at
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working
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life
,
however
, ladies have vast knowledge about their family and
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children
for that they do not have much
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Idea
about job. Ladies face more
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draconian
situation
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then
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man
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because
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man
play significant role in
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working
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life
.
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Men
can overcome any harsh situation in society.
For instance
in
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working
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life
there is a
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different
stages and in all stages work
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get
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hard
and for that
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women
can face it
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because
they
also
have responsibility of their family at
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
home and
they could not much work then
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.
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As
a result
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women
is not
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good
at
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job


In conclusion
, I conclude that
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women
are better at raising
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children
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but
in
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working
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life
the
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women
role
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get
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dropped down
and for this. I
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agree
with this statement that
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women
are finer at home
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but
not at
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job
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IELTS essay Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on working like fe to what extent

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  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
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