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Essay topics: TPO-20 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans v.1

Essay topics: TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans v. 1
Fosters interest in art exhibition is decreasing rapidly, these days. I believe the main reason of such trend is the increased curiosity of public towards social media and other entertainment facilities. The interest of individuals can be restored in the artist's work by making art shows more attractive and economical. To begin with, I consider the prominent cause of massive change in people's interest is, due to advancement in the technology. Most of today's generation enjoys to utilize their time on social networking sites such as Facebook and Instagram. And by inspiring from this trend, some artists have created online pages where they showcase their talent by online posts instead of displaying them in art galleries. For instance, famous painter Mr. Abdul Khayat uploads his art work on his Instagram page, where he has around millions of followers. Now, I think local authorities should come forward to rediscover the interest of public in offline art displays. Government can attract visitors by making free entries to the art display centres on weekends, when most of the public is looking for outing places. To elucidate, recently The National Art Gallery House in Delhi attracted hundreds of local and foreign visitors by reducing its entry fees to 50 percent. Hence, such welfare actions taken by public authorities can assist artists to make their comeback in the physical world. To Conclude, the main cause of reduced interest among people for art galleries is the expansion of the digital world. And art display houses can regain their place in society with the helpful actions of the government.
Fosters
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interest
in
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art
exhibition is decreasing
rapidly
, these days. I believe the main reason of such trend is the increased curiosity of
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public
towards social media and other entertainment facilities. The
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interest
of individuals can
be restored
in the artist's work by making
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art
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shows
more attractive and economical.

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begin
with, I consider the prominent cause of massive
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change
in
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people
's
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interest
is, due to advancement in the technology. Most of
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today
's generation
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enjoys to utilize
their time on social networking sites such as Facebook and Instagram. And by inspiring from this trend,
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some
artists have created online pages where they showcase their talent by online posts
instead
of displaying them in
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art
galleries.
For instance
,
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famous
painter Mr. Abdul
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Khayat
uploads his
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art
work on his Instagram page, where he has around millions of followers.

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Now
, I
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think
local authorities should
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come
forward to rediscover the
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interest
of
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public
in offline
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art
displays.
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Government
can attract visitors by making free entries to the
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art
display
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centres
on weekends, when most of the
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public
is looking for outing places. To elucidate, recently The National
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Art
Gallery
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House
in Delhi attracted hundreds of local and foreign visitors by reducing its entry fees to 50 percent.
Hence
, such welfare actions taken by
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public
authorities can assist artists to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their comeback in the physical world.

To Conclude
, the main cause of
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reduced
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interest
among
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people
for
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art
galleries is the expansion of the digital world. And
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art
display
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houses
can regain their place in society with the helpful actions of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.
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IELTS essay Essay topics: TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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