Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

TPO23 independent Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In today s world it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct v.2

TPO23 independent In today s world it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct v. 2
Nowadays, we face various conditions in our lives which we need to know how to pass them in a good way. while some people prefer to make abrupt decisions that have high risk, others hold an opinion that finding slower but comprehensive answers for problems is more important. Personally, I believe in the second view point because I think it has better consequences. I have several reasons for my viewpoint, both of which will be mentioned in the following paragraphs. To begin with, I think we all concur that the more rapidly you make a decision, the more mistake you will make. correcting the mistakes needs time to be spent on it, which can postpone the sequence' s actions. Therefore the whole procedure is going to face with delay, and not only will it waste the time but also it will cost expenses. I am going to make an example that is related to my opinion indirectly. Imagine two pupils taking a same exam and they had 1 hour to finish the exam. The first one writes down the answers quickly without thinking about the problems, however, the second student put away the pen and starts to think about the question from a different point in order to make the best solution. The hasty one finishes his exam in 30 minutes and start to check what he has written down on the paper when he finds his mistakes it makes his anxiety because of he afraid of time. so he rubs the paper and makes the paper dirty. this stress reduces his mental performance too which leads him to decide incorrectly again and again. On the other hand, the clever student who goes step by step with confidence finisheses his exam maybe faster than the previous pupil and without any stress or mistakes. The second one uses his time efficiently and reach to the point without any street. Secondly, I think each action we make has numerous consequences that must consider before taking the action. To shed more light on the matter, some times individuals make a decision which is seen a good one but it has uncountable harmful effects on other aspects of our lives. For example, my brother has a soap company. In their manufactory, they use so many chemical materials in order to improve the quality of their products. but as you know these chemicals have numerous noxious influences on nature surrounding us. my brother decided to add a new chemical formula in his products without thinking about the other aspect of his actions because he wanted to make a good profit and quickly from this big change in his company. they depleted their waste on nature and this innovative method made these swedge more harmful for nature. After detecting these fact from organization which oversee the factories performance they close the industry for 3 years which put considerable pressure on my brothers financially and emotionally. I think if he thought about his decision at first, the result would be different. To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments, I think we ought to think about our actions precisely before taking any. because some bad steps in our life can affects on all part of our lives. Try to not consider thinking at the first point as a wasting of time because it will help you to not waste your time in the future, nor will your money.
Nowadays, we face various conditions in our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
which we need to know how to pass them in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
way.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
prefer to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
abrupt
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
that have high
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
, others hold an opinion that finding slower
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
comprehensive answers for problems is more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
.
Personally
, I believe in the second view
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
point
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
it has better consequences. I have several reasons for my viewpoint, both of which will
be mentioned
in the following paragraphs.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
we all concur that the more
rapidly
you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decision
, the more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mistake
you will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
correcting
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mistakes
needs
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
to
be spent
on it, which can postpone the
Possible spelling mistake found.
sequence&
#039; s actions.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
the whole procedure is going to face with delay, and not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
will it waste the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
it will cost expenses. I am going to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
an example that
is related
to my opinion
indirectly
. Imagine two pupils taking a same
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
exam and
they had 1 hour to finish the exam. The
first
one writes down the answers
quickly
without thinking about the problems,
however
, the second student put away the pen and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
about the question from a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
point
in order to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
the best solution. The hasty one finishes his exam in 30 minutes and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
what he has written down on the paper when he finds his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mistakes
it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
his anxiety
Probable usage error. Use "because he" instead.
because of he
afraid of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
so
he rubs the paper and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
makes
the paper dirty.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
his mental performance too which leads him to decide
incorrectly
again and again. On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, the clever student who goes step by step with confidence
Possible spelling mistake found.
finisheses
his exam maybe faster than the previous pupil and without any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mistakes
. The second one
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
efficiently
and reach to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
point
without any street.

Secondly
, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
action
we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
has numerous consequences that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
consider
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
taking the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
action
. To shed more light on the matter,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
times
individuals
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decision
which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
one
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it has uncountable harmful effects on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
aspects of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
.
For example
, my brother has a soap
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. In their
Possible spelling mistake found.
manufactory
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
chemical materials in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the quality of their products.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
but
as you know these chemicals have numerous noxious influences on nature surrounding us. my brother decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
a new chemical formula in his products without thinking about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
aspect of his actions
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
he wanted to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
profit and
quickly
from this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
they
depleted their waste on nature and this innovative method made
Possible spelling mistake found.
these swedge
more harmful for nature. After detecting
Did you mean "this fact" or "these facts"?
these fact
from organization which oversee the
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "factories'" or "factory's"?
factories
performance they close the industry for 3 years which put considerable pressure on my brothers
financially
and
emotionally
. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
if he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
about his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decision
at
first
, the result would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
.

To
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
we ought to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
about our actions
precisely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
taking any.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
because
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
steps in our life can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "affect"
affects
on all part of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. Try to not consider thinking at the
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
point
as a wasting of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you to not waste your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
in the future, nor will your money.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay TPO23 independent In today s world it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
574 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts