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TPO-06 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO-06 - Independent Writing Task Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
Without a shadow of the doubt, having a comfortable life play a vital role in social development and progress. People who live in a good condition can do many helpful actions for their country. Many people contend that life today is easier and more comfortable than past, while others assert that when our grandparents were children life was easier than now. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree tat life today is easier comparet to the past. In the ensuing lines, I delve into several reasons to substantiate my point. The first and possibly the paramount consequential reason is that currently there are a lot of advanced devices. For example, my mother has plenty of electrical devices in her kitchen for washing clothes and dishes, or for cooking. So, she can do these works quickly without being nervous. In contrast, my grandmother states that doing these amount of works was very hard for him especially with two kids. As you can see, nowadays, life is easier. Another point springing to mind is travel. Imagine the number of transportation vehicles that we have now such as airplains, tains, buses, cars and even cars without drivers. These days, the world alerts swiftly and humankind experiences a huge enhancement and achievement including transportation. As a result, by having these fast vehicles we can move from one place to another place just in hours, but this option was not available in past. As a result, I belive today life is comfortable in compered to the past. This progressive world not only assists people to be more comfortable but also creates a big opportunity to build and detect other useful devices for their lives. To sum it all up, it is easy to see the advantages of living now in comparison with living past. Today people because of access to advanced devices can do their actions soon and in a simple way. Also, they can move from one place to another just in hours by having modern vehicles. I hope someday we can improve our knowledge in various field like healthcare devices to have more comfortable life even better than now!
Without a shadow of the doubt, having a
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comfortable
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life
play a vital role in social development and progress.
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People
who
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live
in a
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good
condition can do
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many
helpful actions for their country.
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Many
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people
contend that
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life
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today
is easier and more
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comfortable
than
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past
, while others assert that when our grandparents were children
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life
was easier than
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now
. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point.
However
, my personal experience and actual observation of
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life
have led me to
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agree
tat
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life
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today
is easier
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comparet
to the
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past
. In the ensuing lines, I delve into several reasons to substantiate my point.

The
first
and
possibly
the paramount consequential reason is that
currently
there are
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a lot of
advanced
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devices
.
For example
, my mother has
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plenty
of electrical
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devices
in her kitchen for washing clothes and dishes, or for cooking.
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So
, she can do these works
quickly
without being nervous.
In contrast
, my grandmother states that doing these amount of works was
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very
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hard
for him
especially
with two kids. As you can
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see
, nowadays,
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life
is easier.

Another point springing to mind is travel. Imagine the number of transportation vehicles that we have
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now
such as
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airplains
,
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tains
, buses, cars and even cars without drivers. These days, the world alerts
swiftly
and humankind experiences a huge enhancement and achievement including transportation.
As a result
, by having these
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fast
vehicles we can
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move
from one place to another place
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just
in hours,
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but
this option was not available in
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past
.
As a result
,
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I belive
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today
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life
is
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comfortable
in
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compered
to the
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past
. This progressive world not
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only
assists
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people
to be more
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comfortable
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but
also
creates a
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big
opportunity to build and detect other useful
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devices
for their
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lives
.

To sum it all up, it is easy to
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see
the advantages of living
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now
in comparison
with living
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past
.
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Today
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people
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because
of access to advanced
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devices
can do their actions
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soon
and
Consider replacing "in a simple way" with the adverb for "simple"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a simple way
.
Also
, they can
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move
from one place to another
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just
in hours by having modern vehicles. I hope someday we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
our knowledge in various field like healthcare
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devices
to have more
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comfortable
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life
even better than
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now
!
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-06 - Independent Writing Task Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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