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TPO #4Independent Toefl taskIn twenty years there will be fewer cars in the street than there are today. v.2

TPO #4Independent Toefl taskIn twenty years there will be fewer cars in the street than there are today. v. 2
As a person living in 2017, I would have to say that I disagree. There are many reasons for this, some geological, some political and I shall try to explain somme of the reasons here. Statistics show that population of almost all countries are growing, in many it is even advertiesd to have children to secure the future of the country. Roughly speaking, more people means more vehicles. However, it' s for sure that the usage of public transportation will be increased, mainly in developed countries that undrestand that this century is the fall of fuel fossiis and the time to face some real enviormental problems. I think in twenty years, in developed countries price of having a car will be immensely increased. and therefore most people will try to use public transportation instead of their personal vehicles. this reuces the usage of cars, but will not enough because some countries are not as enthusiastic about world problems as Europe or United States. The rest of the world, less developed countries in Asia and South America and Africa, the requied regulations for this century will not be placed and the number of cars will increase overall. This means more enviormental problems in the future. As an example, in America, most car production companies have moved toward an electric future. But in Asia or Africa, still Internal combustion engine cars are being sold without any alternative. I believe, the only solution is to work together. Because solving problems in one part of the world will not solve the problem it self. In many other cases this will eventually cause imigration. Reduction of cars, is like any other world problem and needs to be tackled together. So this issue needs to be addressed at international gatherings and proper laws should be set for car companies and public transportation globaly, in order to reduce cars and the health hazards that it brings.
As a person living in 2017, I would
have to
say that I disagree. There are
many
reasons for this,
some
geological,
some
political and I shall try to
explain
somme
of the reasons here.

Statistics
show
that population of almost all
countries
are growing, in
many
it is even
advertiesd
to have children to secure the future of the
country
. Roughly speaking, more
people
means
more vehicles.

However
,
it&
#039; s for sure that the usage of public transportation will
be increased
,
mainly
in developed
countries
that
undrestand
that this century is the fall of fuel
fossiis
and the time to face
some
real
enviormental
problems.

I
think
in twenty years, in developed
countries
price of having a
car
will be
immensely
increased.
and
therefore
most
people
will try to
use
public transportation
instead
of their personal vehicles.
this
reuces
the usage of
cars
,
but
will not
enough
because
some
countries
are not as enthusiastic about
world
problems
as Europe or United States. The rest of the
world
, less developed
countries
in Asia and South America and Africa, the
requied
regulations for this century will not
be placed
and the number of
cars
will increase
overall
. This means more
enviormental
problems
in the future.

As an example, in America, most
car
production
companies
have
moved
toward an electric future.
But
in Asia or Africa,
still
Internal combustion engine
cars
are
being sold
without any alternative.

I believe, the
only
solution is to work together.
Because
solving
problems
in one part of the
world
will not solve the
problem
it self
. In
many
other cases this will
eventually
cause
imigration
. Reduction of
cars
, is like any other
world
problem
and needs to
be tackled
together.
So
this issue needs to
be addressed
at international gatherings and proper laws should
be set
for
car
companies
and public transportation
globaly
, in order to
reduce
cars
and the health hazards that it brings.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO #4Independent Toefl taskIn twenty years there will be fewer cars in the street than there are today. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
319 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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