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TPO 44 speaking question no 2Some people believe that primary schools should no longer teach children how to write by hand, and instead should spend time teaching them how to type on a computer. Other people believe that it is still important for schools v.1

TPO 44 speaking question no 2Some people believe that primary schools should no longer teach children how to write by hand, and instead should spend time teaching them how to type on a computer. Other people believe that it is still important for schools v. 1
Physical exercise is the key to health. Some people argue that it is solely parent’s responsibility to make sure that their children get daily sporting activity and teaching institutes should not waste their important time on it. In my opinion, although mother and father are responsible for it. However, the school has an obligation to students’ health too. It is the duty of parents’ to take care of their children. Even though they should encourage them to exercise daily, they spend most of their day at work and are not always available to ensure that their young ones are getting enough physical activity along with other things. To illustrate, students are tired at the end of the day and are not able to drill properly. Therefore, schools should step forward and take responsibility for this work. Students spend most of their day at school. Parents’ pay a huge amount of the fee not just so their sons and daughters are taught academics but, instead, trained as a whole. According to a recent study conducted at Harvard University, institutes who focus on extracurricular activities produce smart graduates. Hence, schools should have a proper time allotted to sports lesson as part of their curriculum. In conclusion, it is argued by some people that educational facilities should not waste hours on outdoor sporting activities and parents should be totally considered obligated to ensure this. In my opinion, teenagers spend more time at school and they should be held accountable for it while the mother and father should play a small role too.
Physical exercise is the key to health.
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Some
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people
argue that it is
solely
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parent’s
responsibility to
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make
sure that their children
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get
daily sporting
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activity
and teaching institutes should not waste their
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important
time on it. In my opinion, although mother and father are responsible for it.
However
, the
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school
has an obligation to students’ health too.

It is the duty of
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parents’
to take care of their children.
Even though
they should encourage them to exercise daily, they spend most of their day at work and are not always available to ensure that their young ones are getting
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enough
physical
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activity
along with other things. To illustrate, students
are tired
at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the day and are not able to drill
properly
.
Therefore
,
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schools
should step forward and take responsibility for this work.

Students spend most of their day at
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school
.
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Parents’
pay a huge amount of the fee not
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just
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so
their sons and daughters
are taught
academics
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but
,
instead
, trained as a whole. According to a recent study conducted at Harvard University, institutes who focus on extracurricular
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activities
produce smart graduates.
Hence
,
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schools
should have a proper time allotted to
The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "sport".
sports
lesson as part of their curriculum.

In conclusion
, it
is argued
by
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some
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people
that educational facilities should not waste hours on outdoor sporting
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activities
and
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parents
should be
totally
considered obligated to ensure this. In my opinion,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
spend more time at
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
school and
they should
be held
accountable for it while the mother and father should play a
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small
role too.
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IELTS essay TPO 44 speaking question no 2Some people believe that primary schools should no longer teach children how to write by hand, and instead should spend time teaching them how to type on a computer. Other people believe that it is still important for schools v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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