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Some people believe that primary schools should no longer teach children how to write by hand and instead should spend time teaching them how to type on a computer Other people believe that it is still important for schools to teach children to have good v.1

Some people believe that primary schools should no longer teach children how to write by hand and instead should spend time teaching them how to type on a computer Other people believe that it is still important for schools to teach children to have good v. 1
Densely populated cities around the world require well developed public transportation system to move people around so according to many, the underground railway system seems the most suitable for this purpose. In my opinion, I consider that the metro can offer the convenience people need to move around in a busy city as it will provide a hitch-free journey for passengers. An important reason why the metro is the most convenient public mobility system is that, it offers riders prompt arrival at their destinations. For instance, the underground railway system does not encounter the kind of traffic experienced while moving around with other means of public transport. This translates to a smooth, quick journey without hiccups for passengers. Hence, people arrive at their various destinations promptly and as a result avoid going late for work, classes, and business meetings. A second reason to consider while using the metro is that, passengers encounter less distractions while on board the train. Consider that many people like to read or listen to music while moving around, the last thing they would accommodate is distraction from other passengers. The underground railway system has designated points for drops, so, no frequent stops by passengers and therefore, less distraction for riders. Consequently, you observe a more organised sitting arrangement, hence, less frequent interruptions from fellow passengers. In conclusion, for anyone who desires and appreciates comfort while moving around a busy city in a public transport system, the metro should be the one and only alternative as it offers prompt arrival at destinations, as well as a stress-free journey devoid of frequent distractions.
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populated cities
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well developed
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public
transportation
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system
to
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move
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people
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around
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so
according to
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many
, the underground railway
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system
seems the most suitable for this purpose. In my opinion, I consider that the
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metro
can offer the convenience
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people
need to
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move
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around
in a busy city as it will provide a hitch-free journey for passengers.

An
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important
reason why the
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metro
is the most convenient
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public
mobility
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system
is that, it offers riders prompt arrival at their destinations.
For instance
, the underground railway
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system
does not encounter the kind of traffic experienced while moving
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around
with other means of
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public
transport. This translates to a smooth, quick journey without hiccups for
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passengers
.
Hence
,
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people
arrive at their various destinations
promptly
and
as a result
avoid going late for work, classes, and business meetings.

A second reason to consider while using the
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metro
is that,
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passengers
encounter
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less
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distractions
while on board the train. Consider that
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many
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people
like to read or listen to music while moving
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around
, the last thing they would accommodate is
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distraction
from other
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passengers
. The underground railway
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system
has designated points for drops,
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so
, no frequent
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stops
by
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passengers
and
therefore
, less
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distraction
for riders.
Consequently
, you observe a more
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organised
sitting arrangement,
hence
, less frequent interruptions from fellow passengers.

In conclusion
, for anyone who desires and appreciates comfort while moving
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around
a busy city in a
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public
transport
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system
, the
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metro
should be the one and
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only
alternative as it offers prompt arrival at destinations,
as well
as a
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stress
-free journey devoid of frequent
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distractions
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that primary schools should no longer teach children how to write by hand and instead should spend time teaching them how to type on a computer Other people believe that it is still important for schools to teach children to have good v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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