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you are going on vacation and need someone to look after your apartment while you are on vacationWrite a letter to your friend, where are the key, ask him to take care of your apartment, what to expect on the day of your arrival. v.1

you are going on vacation and need someone to look after your apartment while you are on vacationWrite a letter to your friend, where are the key, ask him to take care of your apartment, what to expect on the day of your arrival. v. 1
Education qualifications plays a vital growth in the todays world. Underprivileged adolescents find it hard to get admission into colleges. However, I believe universities should support and make it more accessible to them to join. To embark upon, education qualifications plays an imperative role in the development of a person and should be a right of every individual. In the recent times, we have seen education has become extremely expensive, which cannot be afforded by the underprivileged people. Hence the educational institutions, can play a vital role in setting up financial aid in various ways, such as reducing the fee structure, concession on course material Furthermore, another major concern could be that, most of the students are the sole bread earner of the family, and they have huge pressure to work and make money rather than study. For this reason, a number of them are not able to get into institutions. The institutions here can support them by, providing them with some in campus jobs. This initiative will not only help them make some money and at the same time they can study and attain a qualification which, will benefit in the long run. In addition, creating awareness can also help these students getting a place in the college. As most of the campuses are in the city, very few underprivileged people will be aware of their presence. By organising some awareness programs in the villages and local city areas will create awareness among these students. In addition, there could be a lot of cultural gaps, which could cause hindrance for a number of students to join. The university can take some measures such as conducting some evening classes for these students, which will make them feel more comfortable. In conclusion, education plays a significant role in developing an individual. In my view, the educational institutions need to take measures to support the underprivileged students, which will help the society as a whole.
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qualifications
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plays
a vital growth in the
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todays
world.
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Underprivileged
adolescents find it
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hard
to
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get
admission into colleges.
However
, I believe universities should support and
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make
it more accessible to them to
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join
.

To embark upon,
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education
qualifications
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plays
an imperative role in the development of a person and should be a right of every individual. In the recent times, we have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
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education
has become
extremely
expensive, which cannot
be afforded
by the
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underprivileged
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people
.
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Hence
the educational institutions, can
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play
a vital role in setting up financial aid in various ways, such as reducing the fee structure, concession on course
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material


Furthermore
, another major concern could be that, most of the
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students
are the sole bread earner of the family, and they have huge pressure to work and
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make
money
rather
than study.
For this reason
, a number of them are not able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
into institutions. The institutions here can support them by, providing them with
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some
in campus jobs. This initiative will not
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only
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help
them
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make
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some
money and at the same time they can study and attain a qualification which, will benefit in the long run.

In addition
, creating awareness can
also
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help
these
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students
getting a place in the college. As most of the campuses are in the city,
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very
few
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underprivileged
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people
will be aware of their presence. By
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organising
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some
awareness programs in the villages and local city areas will create awareness among these
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students
.
In addition
, there could be
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a lot of
cultural gaps, which could cause hindrance for a number of
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students
to
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join
. The university can take
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some
measures such as conducting
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some
evening classes for these
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students
, which will
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make
them feel more comfortable.

In conclusion
,
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education
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plays
a significant role in developing an individual. In my view, the educational institutions need to take measures to support the
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underprivileged
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students
, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the society as a whole.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay you are going on vacation and need someone to look after your apartment while you are on vacationWrite a letter to your friend, where are the key, ask him to take care of your apartment, what to expect on the day of your arrival. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
323 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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