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TPO 44 - Question 1 Talk about a special job you have had in the past or would like to have in the future. v.1

TPO 44 - Question 1 Talk about a special job you have had in the past or would like to have in the future. v. 1
Advertising is a pivotal source for marketing products and services of a company. Some people think that advertisements motivates them to buy things while others say that advertisements help them to know about new products and hence improve their lives. This essay will describe how advertisements can make your lifestyle better and therefore, is a boon to the society. Marketing campaigns specifically advertising is one of the great source by which people get to know about the things which are readily available to them. Through adverts on different platforms for example, newspapers, social media, pamphlets, people become aware of the things they can buy at a convenient price. For Example, during Diwali sales people through advertisements get to know about the price and things they can buy and also, which store is offering them a good deal. Moreover, adverts assist people in making comparisons between the products they intend to buy, For example, if anyone is after a phone, so by seeing the advert they can easily make a comparison between the phones and select the one which suits them best. Additionally, it can also help people in finding a substitute of the things they are using, For example, a recent advert showed that OPPO F7 has better qualities than OPPO F6. In a nutshell, according to my view advertisements help people to make aware of the products which may not yet know about. Furthermore, they help us to find suitable alternative of the product we are currently using. Also, it helps to make wise choices in relation to the price of the products, it helps to know the variations in prices tied up with the quality of the product. Therefore, I would definitely agree with the point that advertisements help people to understand the product well and they get good exposure of the products which are there in the market.
Advertising is a pivotal source for marketing
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products
and services of a
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company
.
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Some
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people
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think
that
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advertisements
motivates them to
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buy
things while others say that
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advertisements
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help
them to
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know
about new
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products
and
hence
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improve
their
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lives
. This essay will
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describe
how
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advertisements
can
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make
your lifestyle better and
therefore
, is a boon to the society.

Marketing campaigns
specifically
advertising is one of the great source by which
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people
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get
to
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know
about the things which are
readily
available to them. Through adverts on
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different
platforms for
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example
, newspapers, social media, pamphlets,
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people
become aware of the things they can
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buy
at a convenient
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price
. For
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Example
, during Diwali sales
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people
through
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advertisements
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get
to
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know
about the
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price
and things they can
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buy
and
also
, which store is offering them a
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good
deal.

Moreover
, adverts assist
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people
in making comparisons between the
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products
they intend to
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buy
, For
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example
, if anyone is after a phone,
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so
by seeing the advert they can
easily
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make
a comparison between the phones and select the one which suits them best.
Additionally
, it can
also
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help
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people
in finding a substitute of the things they are using, For
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example
, a recent advert
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showed
that
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OPPO
F7 has better qualities than
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OPPO
F6.

In a nutshell, according to my view
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advertisements
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help
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people
to
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make
aware of the
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products
which may not
yet
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know
about.
Furthermore
, they
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help us to find
suitable alternative of the
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product
we are
currently
using.
Also
, it
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helps
to
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make
wise choices in relation to the
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price
of the
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products
, it
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helps
to
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know
the variations in
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prices
tied up with the quality of the
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product
.
Therefore
, I would definitely
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agree
with the point that
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advertisements
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help
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people
to understand the
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product
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
well and
they
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get
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good
exposure of the
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products
which are there in the market.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 44 - Question 1 Talk about a special job you have had in the past or would like to have in the future. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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