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Describe something you have not done so far but would like to do in the future. Please say– What is it? – When and where would you do it? – Why would you like to do it? v.1

Describe something you have not done so far but would like to do in the future. Please say– What is it? – When and where would you do it? – Why would you like to do it? v. 1
Many argue that governments allocate more budget for the protection of wildlife compared to the other relatively important issues. I strongly disagree with this, as the efforts of the government to prioritize problems such as economics rather than environment are highly evident in most countries. First of all, the majority of states in the world face economic issues including poverty and unemployment. Hence, the governments are allocating massive budgets to reduce poverty by introducing fiscal incentives and other initiatives instead of allocating funds for alternative energy research as an instance. In 2019, the Indonesian government allocated more than 70% of its state budget for economic development, and less than 5% to protect endangered species and to fight deforestation. Therefore, with the fact that poverty will still occur for the next few decades, the government will most likely prioritize economic over environment. Moreover, many governments still view environment problems such as deforestation and animal’s extinction as one of their least priorities and still have not allocated much money for them. These issues are deemed to be less likely affecting their citizens, and the society need food and other basic necessities from stable economy. For instance, the Indonesian government has never allocated much budget on deforestation, causing massive haze from forest burning occurring every year in Sumatra island. For the next few years at least, the government might not shift their focus to environment. In conclusion, some layer of society argue that the government spent too much money on the protection of wildlife. However, I have a different view as the policies taken by the governments have proven the otherwise.
Many
argue that
governments
allocate more
budget
for the protection of wildlife compared to the other
relatively
important
issues. I
strongly
disagree with this, as the efforts of the
government
to prioritize problems such as
economics
rather
than environment are
highly
evident in most countries.

First of all
, the majority of states in the world face
economic
issues including poverty and unemployment.
Hence
, the
governments
are allocating massive
budgets
to
reduce
poverty by introducing fiscal incentives and other initiatives
instead
of allocating funds for alternative energy research as an instance. In 2019, the Indonesian
government
allocated more than 70% of its state
budget
for
economic
development, and less than 5% to protect endangered species and to fight deforestation.
Therefore
, with the fact that poverty will
still
occur for the
next
few decades, the
government
will most likely prioritize
economic
over environment.

Moreover
,
many
governments
still
view environment problems such as deforestation and animal’s extinction as one of their least priorities and
still
have not allocated much money for them. These issues
are deemed
to be less likely affecting their citizens, and the society need food and other
basic necessities
from stable economy.
For instance
, the Indonesian
government
has never allocated much
budget
on deforestation, causing massive haze from forest burning occurring every year in Sumatra island. For the
next
few years at least, the
government
might not shift their focus to environment.

In conclusion
,
some
layer of society argue that the
government
spent too much money on the protection of wildlife.
However
, I have a
different
view as the policies taken by the
governments
have proven the
otherwise
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe something you have not done so far but would like to do in the future. Please say– What is it? – When and where would you do it? – Why would you like to do it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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