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Do you agree or disagree? Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. v.74

Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. v. 74
Social media applications are becoming increasingly common and can be detrimental to children who frequently use them without any supervision to interact with old and new friends. This essay will suggest some ways to tackle this social problem. One main problem that results when children use online forums to connect with their peers and strangers is that they become exposed to negative influence and cyber predators. In an attempt to find solutions, parents need to enlighten their young adults on the disastrous consequences of chatting with people on the internet so that they do not fall victims. Additionally, parents can periodically monitor chats and messages of their teens to ensure that they are not receiving any threats or illicit images from the people they socialize with. For example, a recent report by BBC has revealed that parents who supervise their children’s online activities are twice likely to discover any usual activity and take necessary action than those who do not do this. Another possible solution is for social media companies to set up age limits on networking apps. For instance, Facebook recently updated its privacy policy that limits access to kids under the age of ten. Moreover, WhatsApp, a major social media app, recently announced plans to unveil its messaging app for kids. Hopefully, this would help to reduce the number of young people who are bullied online since only teenagers will use it. To conclude, young people use the internet daily to interact with various people online without any guidance and this makes them fall prey to cyber crime. In order for children to be out of harm’s way, parents should keep an eye on their communications and give them advice, and social media companies need to provide apps that are suited for them.
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applications are becoming
increasingly
common and can be detrimental to
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children
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who
frequently
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use
them without any supervision to interact with
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old
and new friends. This essay will suggest
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some
ways to tackle this
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social
problem.

One main problem that results when
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children
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use
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online
forums to connect with their peers and strangers is that they become exposed to
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negative
influence and cyber predators. In an attempt to find solutions,
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parents
need to enlighten their young adults on the disastrous consequences of chatting with
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people
on the internet
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so
that they do not fall victims.
Additionally
,
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parents
can
periodically
monitor chats and messages of their teens to ensure that they are not receiving any threats or illicit images from the
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people
they socialize with.
For example
, a recent report by BBC has revealed that
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parents
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who
supervise their
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children’s
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online
activities are twice likely to discover any usual activity and take necessary action than those
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who
do not do this.

Another possible solution is for
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social
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media
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companies
to set up age limits on networking apps.
For instance
, Facebook recently updated its privacy policy that limits access to kids under the age of ten.
Moreover
, WhatsApp, a major
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social
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media
app, recently announced plans to unveil its messaging app for kids.
Hopefully
, this would
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help
to
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reduce
the number of young
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people
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who
are bullied
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online
since
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only
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teenagers
will
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use
it.

To conclude
, young
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people
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use
the internet daily to interact with various
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people
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online
without any guidance and this
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makes
them fall prey to cyber crime. In order for
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children
to be out of harm’s way,
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parents
should
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keep
an eye on their communications and give them advice, and
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social
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media
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
need to provide apps that
are suited
for them.
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IELTS essay Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long. v. 74

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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