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TPO 41. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teacher were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

TPO 41. Teacher were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
It is true that it costs enormous amounts of money to preserve historical buildings rather than building modern premises. I disagree with this statement to a large extent and I think that it is worthwhile to restore ancient monuments. To begin with the benefits of erecting new buildings as compared to protect old ones. Firstly, modern premises will be built according to the requirements of modern people and it will be comfortable for them to use for any purpose. For instance, school premise needs latest technology for modern education as nowadays technological gadgets are required to educate students so schools are built according to requirement of students and teachers so latest equipments can be installed and used. Secondly, modern buildings would be more secure and long lasting as these places are made with latest material and also latest equipments are installed for safety purposes like sound proof doors, gadgets to withstand with earthquake or storm. However, old monument may become the cause of the threat of human life as some historical buildings are on extinction and these buildings should be demolished. Apart from this, there are many reasons why ancient buildings should be restored. As historical places are the identity and heritage of any country or city. If these buildings are demolished then history and culture of that region would die out and people cannot come to know about the past of the people and the region. By preserving these building individuals would feel connected to their ancestors and also theses buildings apprise new generation about the life of past people and the culture of that region. Moreover, historical monuments can bring the tourism in a particular city and government can make it a source of revenue. For example, more tourists would visit these buildings and more they would spend, thus it leads to the development of that city and country as it would increase job opportunities and would encourage people to start a small business. In addition to this, the authorities would make improvements to the road system and transportations. Therefor, it is win-win situations for both individuals and government. In conclusion, although there are many advantages of constructing new buildings, to restore ancient monuments is more beneficial.
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historical
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rather
than
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building
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modern
premises. I disagree with this statement to a large extent and I
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think
that it is worthwhile to restore ancient monuments.

To
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begin
with the benefits of erecting new
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buildings
as compared to protect
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old
ones.
Firstly
,
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modern
premises will
be built
according to the requirements of
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modern
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people
and it will be comfortable for them to
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use
for any purpose.
For instance
, school premise needs
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latest
technology for
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modern
education as nowadays technological gadgets
are required
to educate students
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so
schools
are built
according to requirement of students and teachers
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so
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latest
equipments can
be installed
and
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used
.
Secondly
,
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modern
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buildings
would be more secure and
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long lasting
as these places
are made
with
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latest
material and
also
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latest
equipments
are installed
for safety purposes like sound proof doors, gadgets to withstand with earthquake or storm.
However
,
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old
monument may become the cause of the threat of human life as
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some
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historical
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buildings
are on extinction and these
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buildings
should
be demolished
.

Apart from this, there are
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many
reasons why ancient
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buildings
should
be restored
. As
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historical
places are the identity and heritage of any country or city. If these
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buildings
are demolished
then history and culture of that region would
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die
out and
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people
cannot
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come
to know about the past of the
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people
and the region. By preserving these
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building
individuals would feel connected to their ancestors and
also
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theses
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buildings
apprise new generation about the life of past
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people
and the culture of that region.
Moreover
,
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historical
monuments can bring the tourism in a particular city and
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government
can
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make
it a source of revenue.
For example
, more tourists would visit these
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buildings
and more they would spend,
thus
it leads to the development of that city and country as it would increase job opportunities and would encourage
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people
to
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start
a
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small
business.
In addition
to this, the authorities would
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make
improvements to the road system and transportations. Therefor, it is win-win situations for both individuals and
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government
.

In conclusion
, although there are
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many
advantages of constructing new
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buildings
, to restore ancient monuments is more beneficial.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay TPO 41. Teacher were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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